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The bar chart shows the percentage of young people in higher education in 2000, 2005 and 2010.The bar chart compares the proportion of young people in higher education in three different years (2000, 2005, and 2010) in four nations.Overall, the percentage of young people enrolling higher school was increase in these countries, with the exception of country B in all three years. In addition,  the country D had the greatest increase in young people studying higher school during the period shown.In 2000,  the young people in higher education in country D accounted for the highest percentage, which increased almost three seconds of these people in country A, about 60% and 38% respectively. Over the following for ten years, these figures for both countries climbed constantly by 20% each.Turning to the two remaining countries, we can see that, in country C, young people participation in higher education grew a negligible amount by 2% over a decade. By contrast, these people in country B remained at 40% during the period shown, despite a small drop at 5% in 2005.Can you get score my writing on which band ??

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The bar chart compares the proportion of young people in higher education (If you want a synonym for "higher education" in British English it is "tertiary educational institutions", and in American English, "post-secondary education." Using text different from the instructions, but with the same meaning, gets you a higher score in "lexical resource.") in three different years (2000, 2005, and 2010) in four nations, referred to as countries A, B, C and D..

Overall, the percentage of young people enrolling higher school (awkward, unnatural phrase) was increase (wrong verb form. You cannot use the base form with the helping verb "be.") in these countries, with the exception of country B in all three years. In addition, ~~the~~ country D had the greatest increase in young people studying higher school (We study English or history. We do not study schools.) ~~during the period shown~~.

In 2000, the young people in higher education in country D accounted for the highest percentage, which increased almost three seconds Three seconds is a measure of time. There are 60 seconds in a minute.) of these people in country A, about 60% and 38% respectively. Over the following for ten (Did you mean fourteen?) years, the~~se figures~~ percentages for both countries climbed ~~constantl~~y (Wrong adverb. "Constantly", "gradually" or "continuously " are used in line graphs.) by 20% each.

~~Turning to the two remaining countries, we can see that,~~ (unnecessary verbiage) in country C, the level of participation of young people (wrong form. You need the possessive.) ~~participation~~ in higher education ~~grew~~ went up a negligible amount, by 2% over a the decade. By contrast, ~~these people~~ in country B, it remained at 40% ~~during the period shown~~, despite a small drop of at 5% in 2005.

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The bar chart compares the levels of enrollment of young people in tertiary educational institutions, measured in percentages, in four countries ( A, B, C and D ) every five years, starting in 2000 and ending in 2010.

Overall, there was an increase in these levels over the decade, except for Country C, where it remained unchanged. Of all the countries, Country D had the highest percentages by a significant margin. In 2000, country A had the lowest, and in the other two years, 2005 and 2010, the lowest were for Country B.

At the beginning of the period, six in ten young people in Country D were enrolled in an institution of higher learning. It was followed by Country C with a 50% enrollment, and then Country B (four in ten) and lastly, Country A, with 2% less. At the end of the period, the percentages in Country D had increased by 20%; eight out of ten young people were attending classes. Country A also increased its level by 20%, ending in second place at about 58%. In Countries B and C, it had changed very little over this decade, hovering around 40 and 50 percent, respectively.

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