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XxNADJAxx Posted 20 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

My third essay....Please, have a look!! :)

0 01i00Could anybody check my essay? I have used some expressions and phrasal verbs which I hope fit in the context.02br
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00These days, more and more people are using their own cars to commute. The high levels of pollution found in the air may have something to do with the increasing number of vehicles in our cities. When faced with taking private cars or public transport people react in different ways. I will discuss for and against arguments about using either private cars or public transport in this essay.02br
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00Some people prefer use private cars to public transport for several reasons. First, they think that private cars are faster than public transport since you don’t have to spend your priceless time waiting for the bus under a bus-shelter crammed with people. Second, you can go from work to home directly without stopping time and time again picking people up. On the other hand, there are people who don’t like to share room with unknown persons and they don’t like standing up during the trip. Take buses as examples. In rush hours, it is very difficult to find any seat left and eventually you end up grasping a hand bar and trying to keep your balance to not be flung00 00when the bus brakes.02br
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00There are other people who prefer public transport to private cars. In my view, public transport is cheaper than using our own cars. Ask people who use private cars on a regular basis how much money they spend on their cars every month. Not to mention the price of the parking and fuel or the expense produced when you take your car to the garage to have it repaired. Unlike private cars, 00 00public transport has got reserved lanes in many cities so long delays due to traffic congestion can be avoided using a bus or a taxi. In these cities public transport makes for faster than private cars. 00 00As for as environment is concerned the use of public transport instead of private cars makes a difference. For instance, if the people who use a bus used their own vehicles instead of, it would be the equivalent to 60 cars producing fumes.02br
00In conclusion, using private cars is expensive and produces more pollution on atmosphere than public transport. All in all, public transport is probed to be more efficiency and cheaper than private cars. For this reason, I feel that we all should try to use public transport whenever it is possible because is beneficial for your economy, your time and environment.0-
  

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0Hi Nadja,02br 02br 00Nice use of expressions in this essay. Here are some corrections. There are one or two places where a word in your original is not necessary, though there is nothing wrong with using it.

  • 0Hi Nadja,02br 02br 00Nice use of expressions in this essay.
  • Here are some corrections.
  • There are one or two places where a word in your original is not necessary, though there is nothing wrong with using it.
  • I have indicated these by putting square brackets around the word.
  • Let me know if you don’t understand any changes I have made.
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0Hi Nadja,02br
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00Nice use of expressions in this essay. Here are some corrections. There are one or two places where a word in your original is not necessary, though there is nothing wrong with using it. I have indicated these by putting square brackets around the word. Let me know if you don’t understand any changes I have made. – Nick 02br
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0Hi Nick, thank very much for your revision. There are many things to comment on. Could you explain some points?02br
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00 -01i00 01b00'This is02b00 not to mention the price 01b00of parking02b00 and fuel....'02i00 Is it possible to write down just '01i00Not to mention...02i00'? I
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0Hi Nadja,02br
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00-01i00 01b00'This is02b00 not to mention the price 01b00of parking02b00 and fuel....'02i02br
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00You could write the sentence "...ask them how much money they spend on their cars every month, not to mention the price of parking and fuel." 02br
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0 Thanks Nick. I have understood everything. You have made it very easy to understand.02br
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i liked your essay. i'm writting one today. thanks for giving me some ideas Emotion: big smile
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I really liked your essay. I kind of copyed it in my english lesson
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Thnx so much
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Thank you,Nick today is my paper on this essay ,it will help me alotof ,
Najeeb from pakistan,
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Estoy haciendo un trabajo para mi clase de inglés (soy española) y trata de este tema, muchas gracias por ayudarme.

BESOS desde España

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