My thesis review, please revise!

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00I have never pay attention to my grammar, as I don't have to mess with writing too much in my math classes, and my history professor rarely gives me problem on my grammars, they only care about the proofs.02br
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00But now I'm working on the honor thesis for my history degree, and the professor is cracking down on the gammar thingy. Please revise my paper and let me know how I can improve my writing.02br
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01b00Thesis Review:00 01i00A Gooney Bird in the Hornet’s Nest02i00 - 02b02br
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01b00Carolina’s Historical Aviation Commission’s Douglas DC-302b02br
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01b00By Kenyon Travis Lail02b02br
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00 00Kenyon Lail was a student in the 00 at 00 whom had completed History Honor Program. 00 00In his honor thesis, 01i00A Gooney Bird in the Hornet’s Nest02i00, Lail has detail the early days of aviations, the difficulties that the early aviators faced, as well as the influences and impacts from the political and economic aspects during the course of development.00 00Furthermore, the author has focuses on the struggle of commercial flights, the quest of a dream trip for any average person to be realized.00 00In particular, the author had argued that the Douglas DC-3, an aircraft known for its capacity and stability made famous by its wide use during WWII, had provided the commercial airline business with a rarely suitable aircraft for their use, and greatly enhance the realization of air travels.02br
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00 00 00The author of 01i00Gooney Bird02i00 has provides extensive knowledge over the building of commercial aviation in the 010200.00 00Starting with the early days of aviations, in which was carefully examined by the author, whom points out that the lack of comfort, the limitation of capacities, mixing with the unusually high cost, had prevented the growth of commercial flights, with only a few selective elites being able to enjoy air travels.00 00Furthermore, for those whom could afford air travel would certainly preferred other modes of transportation such as trains and ships, that could offered much higher quality of service.00 00The only sell point of flights being speed.00 00A factor that would be largely enhanced by the governments, as pointed out by the author, for the sake of making war.02br
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00 00The thesis is well defined in 01i00Gooney02i00 01i00Bird02i00, as the author has clearly emphasis on his argument that the Douglas DC-3 aircraft is the founding symbol of flight, provided aids for the Piedmont Airlines in its building, and most importantly, promoted the development of commercial passenger air service.00 00The author has demonstrates detailed knowledge of the technical aspect of the aircraft, and use it to strength his claim of how the DC-3 had provided what the other early aircrafts could not, namely the stability and capacity that are essential towards creating a civilian airline.00 00Furthermore, the Douglas DC-3’s importance has been claimed by the author as representing flying in not only for pleasure, but also in business as well as military use for an entire generation.02br
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00 00The author has takes advantage of chronic natural in his thesis.00 00He has provides readers with an extensive amount of background information of aviation, such as the innovations that lead to the first flight and the early public response towards this new invention.00 00Then the author gives a general picture of the developments from early experimental flights, into military/elite dominated air transportations, into the near modern days of commercial/business flights.00 00During the narration of flight developments, the author has describes the influential factors that had been dominating early aviations, from state building that requires the integration of flights into the military, comforts were often being ignored while all researches were dedicated to enhancing capacity and speed.00 00Although the interventions of government had initialized a constant flow of fund towards aviation developments, it had, however, also placed military purpose into top priority in expense of comfort and cost, things that are necessary for the creating a private airline.00 00The author then has shown the readers the technical advantages of the Douglas DC-3, and how it had suited to become the model aircraft compatible with commercial airlines. 02br
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00 00An interesting fact of this thesis is the author’s ability to draw multimedia sources into his project.00 00Even through the main sources that he used to construct his thesis were the books that the author gathered, especially the works of 01i00The Legacy of the DC-302i00 and 01i00Turbulent Skies: The History of Commercial Aviation02i00; however, a great deal of information the author uses were drew from sources in which students usually overlook, such as oral interviews and video recordings.00 00A number of personnel with knowledge of the DC-3 were interviewed by the author, most of them are in some way related to the Carolinas Aviation Museum, including Scott Edwards, a pilot for US Airways and the chief pilot of the museums; Vicki Haren, a former Piedmont employee; and most significantly, Shawn Dorsch, whom had served on the Board of Trustees at the Carolinas Historical Aviation Commission.00 00These interviews had greatly strengthen the author’s claims as they held the key to first hand experiences, in which the words of the interviewees can allow the author to examine how aviation had evolved through out the years, helping the readers to understand how the public reacted to flights, how the first private airlines was started, and how importance was the DC-3, all from the people directly involved.02br
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00 00A secondary source that the author has use in 01i00Gooney Bird02i00 was video recordings, through not much in number, contented with only two DVDs of 01i00The flight of the Pacemaker02i00 and 01i00The Plane That Changed the World02i00, these usual sources of information had nevertheless provided the author an easier way to organize his thesis structure, and possible aided both the author and the readers in our quest to understand the thesis through the use of visual and sounds.00 00As it should be noted, some technical information of aviation cannot be easily described with words, such as the actual stability during the flight and some critical mechanisms of the machine.00 00The clever use of DVDs by the author had compensated these weaknesses.02br
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00 00 00There are, however, still rooms for improvement in 01i00Gooney Bird02i00. 00 00Although the Douglas DC-3 has been lay out in details in the thesis in terms of its technical characteristics and its impact onto aviation developments; not enough information is being offered regarding aircrafts during the days of the DC-3 for comparison.00 00Even through a few early aircrafts were mentioned, along with a comparison between DC-3 and modern days aircrafts, it might have strengthen the author’s claim if he could provide the readers some counter-examples of aircrafts that were potential rivals of DC-3, and show how they were unable to match DC-3 in terms of being a model aircraft for commercial flights.02br
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00 00On the other hand, I do not see the benefit of having the chapter of “Restoration Project” in this thesis.00 00Although it does allow the readers to see the symbolism provided by the DC-3 and how people are trying to revive it, it would serve the thesis better had it been included in the introductions as the opening of the glorious days of the DC-3 buried in the minds of those whom tried to revive it.00 00It can be said that this chapter is clearly out of place.02br
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00 00Despite the shortcomings, 01i00Gooney Bird02i00 had provided readers with a defined thesis, a strong structure, and plenty of evidences, drew from varies type of sources, to support the author’s claims. 00 00The author had explored the early days of aviation, shown the rough path that commercial flights were built upon, and the unique role that the Douglas DC-3 had played.00 00Through 01i00Gooney Bird02i00, with the skillful use of rare sources, readers get a feel of the first hand experience of this magnificent aircraft that allowed average civilians to enjoy the pleasure of air travels.0-