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Anonymous Posted 17 years ago
Grammar

MY these statement ?

I have changed my these statement, but am not sure if it is correct grammartically??

"Learning needs to present in the correct way that teacher is responsible in which memory plays an important role to save and retrieve"



thanks guys.
  

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Not to hurt your feelings, but your thesis statement is really incomprehensible. It seems to be a patchwork of scraps of other sentences thrown together rather haphazardly. You can't just pull a few phrases from here and there among the articles you've read on the subject and expect them to cohere into anything sensible.

— CalifJim

  • Not to hurt your feelings, but your thesis statement is really incomprehensible.
  • It seems to be a patchwork of scraps of other sentences thrown together rather haphazardly.
  • You can't just pull a few phrases from here and there among the articles you've read on the subject and expect them to cohere into anything sensible.
  • You have to understand what you are saying.
  • If you could perhaps explain in a simpler way what you are trying to say, someone on the forum may be able to help you.
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Not to hurt your feelings, but your thesis statement is really incomprehensible. It seems to be a patchwork of scraps of other sentences thrown together rather haphazardly. You can't just pull a few phrases from here and there among the articles you've read on the subject and expect them to cohere into anything sensible. You have to understand what you are saying.

If you could perhaps
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Also, if you are writing a thesis you should be sure to spell "thesis" correctly.
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