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Pamela81 Posted 14 years ago
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please could some teacher check my text and correct when really necessary?
Thank you so much!
Pamela
"When I left my boyfriend about 9 months ago, I was so hopeful, I looked at life smiling and hoping in a better future. I remember when I saw my new flat for the first time, it was so moving and I felt so excited because I thought it was a new beginning for me. By the passing of the time, unfortunately, I realized how much is difficult to live alone on my own and surrounded by people who do not know you and who do not care about you. The only things helping me were my dog and my work. My work helped me keeping me busy, always active, just not giving me the time to think about my sad and depressive life. My dog was my only happiness, my reason of life, without him I could not go on.
Now one of my two only certainties is falling down. My work is in someway oppressing me, my colleagues seem not understand me, sometimes I have the feeling that they think I am inferior because a woman, in their opinion, is not able to make business, they do not admit when I am right and they do not value the work I do. One of my colleague is chauvinist and also so rude and extremely arrogant person, he easily raises his voice and has bad manner while expressing himself. I hate this behaviour, it means for me not to respect the persons around you and in most of the cases, these people react this way, because they are insecure and try to gloss over their insecurity.
My love life does not exist, very often I think that I have no chance to find the man of my dreams, to be honest I think that ít doesn´t exist at all. I think that people can only adapt theirselves to partners, sometimes because they can not find better ones, or because they do not feel like looking for "the perfect one"for the eternity etc...
Maybe there is a small and remote possibilty, and this happens only to the luckiest people, to meet the perfect man, the person who is the ideal partner, it happens really rarely and in this case I really envy these people.
Anyway I think that nobody is always or really at 100% happy. When you think you have everthing, good luck leaves you and when you do not have anything, you get worse and worse.
Eternal happiness does not exist, you can enjoy some moments, some memories or just dreams. Reality is cruel and does not leave space to a long lasting happiness."
please could some teacher check my text and correct when really necessary?
Thank you so much!
Pamela
"When I left my boyfriend about 9 months ago, I was so hopeful, I looked at life smiling and hoping in a better future. I remember when I saw my new flat for the first time, it was so moving and I felt so excited because I thought it was a new beginning for me. By the passing of the time, unfortunately, I realized how much is difficult to live alone on my own and surrounded by people who do not know you and who do not care about you. The only things helping me were my dog and my work. My work helped me keeping me busy, always active, just not giving me the time to think about my sad and depressive life. My dog was my only happiness, my reason of life, without him I could not go on.
Now one of my two only certainties is falling down. My work is in someway oppressing me, my colleagues seem not understand me, sometimes I have the feeling that they think I am inferior because a woman, in their opinion, is not able to make business, they do not admit when I am right and they do not value the work I do. One of my colleague is chauvinist and also so rude and extremely arrogant person, he easily raises his voice and has bad manner while expressing himself. I hate this behaviour, it means for me not to respect the persons around you and in most of the cases, these people react this way, because they are insecure and try to gloss over their insecurity.
My love life does not exist, very often I think that I have no chance to find the man of my dreams, to be honest I think that ít doesn´t exist at all. I think that people can only adapt theirselves to partners, sometimes because they can not find better ones, or because they do not feel like looking for "the perfect one"for the eternity etc...
Maybe there is a small and remote possibilty, and this happens only to the luckiest people, to meet the perfect man, the person who is the ideal partner, it happens really rarely and in this case I really envy these people.
Anyway I think that nobody is always or really at 100% happy. When you think you have everthing, good luck leaves you and when you do not have anything, you get worse and worse.
Eternal happiness does not exist, you can enjoy some moments, some memories or just dreams. Reality is cruel and does not leave space to a long lasting happiness."
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Hi "When I left my boyfriend about 9 months ago, I was very hopeful and I looked at life smiling and hoping for a better future. I remember seeing my new flat for the first time, it was so moving and I felt so excited because I thought it was a new beginning for me. W ith the passag e of time, unfortunately, I realized how much is difficult it is to live alone , surrounded by people who do not know you and who do not care about you.
- Hi "When I left my boyfriend about 9 months ago, I was very hopeful and I looked at life smiling and hoping for a better future.
- I remember seeing my new flat for the first time, it was so moving and I felt so excited because I thought it was a new beginning for me.
- W ith the passag e of time, unfortunately, I realized how much is difficult it is to live alone , surrounded by people who do not know you and who do not care about you.
- The only things helping me were my dog and my work.
- My work helped me by keeping me busy, always active, and not giving me the time to think about my sad and depressive life.
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"When I left my boyfriend about 9 months ago, I was very hopeful and I looked at life smiling and hoping for a better future. I remember seeing my new flat for the first time, it was so moving and I felt so excited because I thought it was a new beginning for me. With the passage of time, unfortunately, I realized how muchis difficu
"When I left my boyfriend about 9 months ago, I was very hopeful and I looked at life smiling and hoping for a better future. I remember seeing my new flat for the first time, it was so moving and I felt so excited because I thought it was a new beginning for me. With the passage of time, unfortunately, I realized how much
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