My statement of purpose / Motivation letter

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00I had to write a statement of purpose for my stay abroad (Erasmus). Would someone read it and give me some hints concerning vocabulary or syntax? 02br
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00Dear Sir or Madam, 02br
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00with this letter I want to explain my motivation to spend one semester in Norway generally and at the BI Norwegian School of Management in particular to broaden my business acquirements and my 01a00individual02a00 00experiences. I am currently in my seventh semester 01a00at02a00 my studies in Business Administration and Engineering (Dipl.-Ing.) and I am scheduling my stay abroad for the 1001sup^{00th02sup}00 semester which is my last graduate semester, starting in january 2008. After an internship I am going to finalise my studies 01a00at02a02br
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00From an experience abroad I am expecting a challenge in professional and personal domains and I hope for improving my knowledge, my language 01a00ability 02a02br
05100 00and other crucial qualifications at a distinguished university in the culturally and historically very interesting 01a00capital 02a05200city of Oslo. 01a00Getting a new perspective on my 02a01a00life02a05300 from a foreign european country is one of my major intents.00 02br
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00I finished my undergraduate studies very successfully in the fifth semester, 01a00whereupon 02a00I was furthermore 01a00permited 02a02br
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00In my graduate courses I focussed technically on automobile engineering an logistics, economically on infrastructure and in business on finance / investment and strategic 00management, whereupon my performance was 01a00above average02a00 01a00hitherto02a02br
05500. Because my semester abroad is going to be my last one, I will bring along plenty of knowledge, what keeps 00determined00 and prosperous studies at BI Norwegian School of Management in good stead. 02br
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00Among my studies I am working at the XXXX, an economic teaching and research unit in the School of Economics & Management at Berlin University of Technology as a project assistant. This is were a also wrote my “Studienarbeit” 01a00which deals with an economic theme concerning comparisons between “Public-Private-Partnerships” and the traditional procurement apprioac02a02br
05600 00h. In the framework of the project work at the WIP, where I am 01a00consigned 02a05700with basically technical 01a00exercise02a05800 00s, my skills to work arduous, motivated and my ability to work under hard pressure 01a00are appraised02a05900very positive. By reason of a technical 01a00relevant 02a051000 00 01a00third-party funds 02a00project lasting until December 2007, it is regrettably not possible for me to spend a whole academic year abroad. 02br
00In addition to my studies I am always interested in broadening my 00acquired01b00 02b00b00usiness-management 00 00and engineering abilities with practical experiences. Thus I twice attended a case study-competition of a big consultancy successfully and visited factories of the ThyssenKrupp AG during a several day lasting excursion. 02br
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00Past my degree I am 01a00planning 02a02br
051100a career in the 01a00field of management02a051200 with a bias towards automotive industry, whereas am not commited yet. 01a00Work placements02a00 and other practical experiences as well as my work at the WIP should encourage my decision making. 02br
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00I choose the country of Norway as my desired destination abroad, because I 01a00am fascinated02a00 by this country already for a long time. With an unique history and its inimitable residents and the terrific nature, Norway provides a multitude of well worth knowing and unique peculiarities. Because the 01a00language02a00 01a00of02a00 01a00instruction02a00 is going to be English and this language accompanied my until my “Abitur” in an specialised course, I discern no problems in communication during and besides the studies. Thereby I think it will be feasible to settle in the norwegian society and to experience the culture and people. During three long journeys, I had the chance to discover – even if from a perspective of an vacationist – the interesting and enriching sides of Norway and its citizens. 02br
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00The BI Norwegian School of Management provides an opportunity for me to achive the goals I expect from a stay abroad. 02br
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00The BI as the 00largest business school in Europe is a worldwide known and reputable, international orientated school and it would be an ideal supplement to my attended studies with the courses I selected from the wide range of course options. The consequent demand to educate01a00 for 02a02br
051300an successful career accomodates me very much. 00The courses offered fit very well with my hitherto existing studies, my interests and my abilities because teamwork, ??? and ???01a00 looms large02a00. Studies at the BI Norwegian School of Management would furthermore, due to the internationality of the school, provide an insight into nationalities and cutures throughout the world. This would open up new and diverse perspectives and is would broaden my horizon with supposably grandiose experiences. 02br
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00I hope with this letter I revealed my impetus and my desire to spend one semester in an amazing country at an unique school of management. I feel confident that my qualifications are01a00 more than 02a02br
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00I am looking forward to a potential semester at the BI Norwegian School of Management and I hope I managed to convince you of my01a00 personatio02a02br
051500 00n and my request. Hopefully you 01a00get down to02a00 a positive appraisal of my application. 02br
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00Thank you very much for your efforts.02br
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00Yours faithfully02br
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00Florian xxxx 02br
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