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Mieganti Posted 18 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

My short essay [need a basic check]

1b00I have a "talent" to make and leave few mistakes in my essays...02br
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00Heavy traffic is one of the biggest problems in our days. There were endless arguments made about solutions so far, but none of them brought results. While few people suggest banning traffic from towns and city centers, others are against this idea.02br
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00In my opinion, transport banning from the city centers is a good idea, because there won‘t be any congestions anymore. What is more, people and tourists would have safe pedestrian-only zones, so it would help to attract more tourists to visit our city monuments. Of course, distances are quite long, so deliveries and public transport should be allowed. 02br
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00On00 the00 other00 hand, this solution is quite inconvenient and it would take a lot of time to make it popular with people. Instead of it there are some alternative solutions such as charging cars for driving into the city centers. Incoming money could be used to create more car parks. Also cars could be allowed only on alternate days.02br
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00To summarise, banning private transport from our cities‘ centres could cause even more inconveniece that the advantage. That‘s why I personally think that traffic should be reduced only in particular days and during the cities fiests a small charge should be taken. In my opinion it could help to reduce heavy traffic problem.0-
  

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0Heavy traffic is one of the biggest problems in our days. There were endless arguments made about solutions so far, but none of them 01i 00has02i 00 brought results. 02br 02br 00In my opinion, 01i 00banning private transport such as cars and motorcycles02i 00 from the city centers is 01i 00in theory, [this was added because you make it sound as if banning traffic was the only good idea where in the second paragraph, you list the other side] 02i 00a good idea [no comma here] because there 01i 00would not02i 00 be any congestions anymore.

  • 0Heavy traffic is one of the biggest problems in our days.
  • There were endless arguments made about solutions so far, but none of them 01i 00has02i 00 brought results.
  • 02br 02br 00In my opinion, 01i 00banning private transport such as cars and motorcycles02i 00 from the city centers is 01i 00in theory, [this was added because you make it sound as if banning traffic was the only good idea where in the second paragraph, you list the other side] 02i 00a good idea [no comma here] because there 01i 00would not02i 00 be any congestions anymore.
  • What is more, people and tourists would have safe pedestrian-only zones, so it would help to attract more tourists to visit our city monuments.
  • ]02i 00 This sentence contradicts the rest of your paragraph.
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0Heavy traffic is one of the biggest problems in our days. There were endless arguments made about solutions so far, but none of them 01i00has02i00 brought results. While few people suggest banning traffic from towns and city centers, others are against this idea.02br
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00In my opinion, 01i00banning private transport such as cars and motor
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0To summarise, banning private transport from our cities‘ centres could cause02br
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00in my opinion it must be city centres not cities centres... 02br
00cmiiw.. 0-
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0Thank you so much for your comments ^_^ 02br
00"Cities" centres was such a stupid mistake because the correct form was written in my English book... Thank you 00poci_wasiats00 for spotting it :]02br
00And thank you Anonymous for your help :} 0-

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