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Na!tSabeS Posted 21 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
my short essay - correction would be appreciated
Hi guys!
I'd be really happy if anyone could have a look at my little essay. It's not that long so it won't take ages to quickly go through it.
Thanks in advance!
The new Rita
The new Rita has changed a lot and above all she developed herself.
She has become more self – confident and does not depend on Frank anymore (p. 77 ll. 2-4). Even if she is now standardized in her judgement in literal terms, she expressed her independance by writing a proper answer and not the answer Frank wanted to her to give.
Furthermore she acquired experience of life, since she realizes the mistakes she did. She admits “[she] was so hungry“ and “[she] wanted it all so much that [she] didn’t want it to be questioned.” (p. 76 ll. 29,30) Rita learnt that literary criticism is not only about “quotes an’ empty phrases” (p. 76 l. 28) but as well about yourself and what you make of it.
Rita’s most valuable change in life is her achieved ability to choose freely between several possibilities, because her doing was previously dominated by Denny or even by the whole working class in a way. As she states several times, “[she has] a choice” (p.77 l. 6) now. It is entirely up to her, whether she wants to have a baby or where she is going to spend christmas, it is only her decision (p. 77 ll. 27,28).
I'd be really happy if anyone could have a look at my little essay. It's not that long so it won't take ages to quickly go through it.
Thanks in advance!
The new Rita
The new Rita has changed a lot and above all she developed herself.
She has become more self – confident and does not depend on Frank anymore (p. 77 ll. 2-4). Even if she is now standardized in her judgement in literal terms, she expressed her independance by writing a proper answer and not the answer Frank wanted to her to give.
Furthermore she acquired experience of life, since she realizes the mistakes she did. She admits “[she] was so hungry“ and “[she] wanted it all so much that [she] didn’t want it to be questioned.” (p. 76 ll. 29,30) Rita learnt that literary criticism is not only about “quotes an’ empty phrases” (p. 76 l. 28) but as well about yourself and what you make of it.
Rita’s most valuable change in life is her achieved ability to choose freely between several possibilities, because her doing was previously dominated by Denny or even by the whole working class in a way. As she states several times, “[she has] a choice” (p.77 l. 6) now. It is entirely up to her, whether she wants to have a baby or where she is going to spend christmas, it is only her decision (p. 77 ll. 27,28).
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who is this new rita
- who is this new rita
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Hi Na!tsabes,
Here's my version:
The new Rita
The new Rita has changed a lot and become more mature.
She has become more self – confident and does not depend on Frank anymore (p. 77 ll. 2-4). Even if she is now standardized in her judgement in literal terms, she is expressing her indepen
Here's my version:
The new Rita
The new Rita has changed a lot and become more mature.
She has become more self – confident and does not depend on Frank anymore (p. 77 ll. 2-4). Even if she is now standardized in her judgement in literal terms, she is expressing her indepen
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Thank you Savvysavz! Especially the first introductory sentence was quite hard, because I didn't know how to express what you called "become more mature".
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You're welcome Nats!
You can develop a project, an idea but a developed person would give a different meaning. I think 'm
You can develop a project, an idea but a developed person would give a different meaning. I think 'm
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I agree with him... He did correct the most of your mistakes... All I can say is:
good luck!!!
:-D
good luck!!!
:-D
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I'am going to study medecine. I want to be a doctor. I choose this mejor beacause I'd like for help other people.
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your grammar using is quite good ..continue your hardwork dear..
for your information,i'm still new in exploring in english
..continue your hardwork dear..for your information,i'm still new in exploring in english
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