My Poems

I feel as a failure
When you're around here
Much better than me
As I could ever be
So many friends
So many talents
I turn all these bends
My feelings so valid
I love you as ever
But you hurt me forever
I don't want to leave you
But I can't believe you

I anyone has any suggestions on how to make my poems better please let me know.

In Failure- I'm not sure how to end it, any suggestions? It doesn't seem right to me.

None of these thoughts go away and all the pain attached to them
I wonder why I shot myself in the back again

All of these people crowd me and all the things they say and then
I wonder why they won't go away and then

I turn around and see you, the pain I hate goes and then
I cry and cover my face again

Surrounded by embarassment and memories.

I feel broken inside, left behind
Lost in my way on this accursed day
I feel the hurt pound, afraid to turn around
Don't want to see when I look at me.

I'm hurt, lost, confused and fooled.
I cry inside, breath alone, scared of the unkown.
Closed, done, tired and killed.
My life is damaged and undone.
Gonna getaway from the real, breakaway and heal.
Erase the pain underneath.
Get loose, forget the numb.
Belong to a memory of hapiness.
No longer wasted, lonely or hidden.
On the floor.

nice ..........keep it up

Thanks!

Add

somethings has to change
dont know what or how

to the end of "failure"

Thanks too ybblueeyes for the suggestion for the ending!

Winds blow
Branches show
The music slow
My heart to go

I was inspired to write the poem "Window" while I was laying in my bed looking out the window one night.