My MOTIVATION LETTER is begging for the help :)

Hi guys !!
I'm applying for a scholarship and I wonder if my motivation letter needs to be fixed or make it more attractive.

I need to answer 2 questions: first, what can the study improve my study, profession, second, how can I affect on cultural, social and economic perspectives of my home university.

I apply as an exchange student to Poland in Social Science, Politics.
I use R as the name of my country because now political situation is kind of sensitive and I don't want to be put in jail haha.

Thank you for wasting your time for me and I do appreciate for your future help!!

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Revoking governments, governed strictly by military, various protestors and a great number of constitutions are forever what can be described about R politics. To compare with Europe, R seems to have either much less democracy or none democracy at all; that has been caused from the beginning of ‘Democracy’. Western countries, the immoral leaders of stable politics, were revolutionized by the citizens; politics and power are everyone’s properties. At the same time, R, however, was switched from Absolute Monarchy to Democracy by the elite oligarchy bringing political powers from the King to themselves. According to that, egalitarian knowledge has been stuck with the specific groups and hardly do people in 70 from 77 provinces, R, understand about it; political dilemmas as all above are results occurring every year. The most arduous difficulty to accept is R people kill people in the same nation. Nevertheless, I have an ambitious dream to help my country, the partner of the world.

I strongly believe that I will be much improved in various ways if I am chosen by Swap and Transfer(SAT). Studying in the world model countries as Europe, I am definitely going to get fresh and fabulous ideas. For example, one course in Warsaw School of Economics, Poland, is Local Democracy; studying egalitarian in outskirts can help me to get great solutions for four-fifth parts of R to rethink local people’s democratic ideas, steady governments, constitutions and no coup detat from the army. Moreover, another course, Local Policy, I am really sure that I am going to know which policies are real good for society. Because I am in R government major, one day I am going to have an opportunity to write policies for everyone and make the R world equally. Other interesting subjects picked are Social Security; the global is insecure but we can handle it by starting having safety environment first and this course is going to give me ideas. Every program in SAT is powerfully developing me and my country.

As far as cultural, social and economic perspectives of my home university are concerned, after coming back to my hometown, I am going to share my experiences in different cultures, political ideas and economy from the country I have been during classes and outsides. Also, I would love to suggest my university to add more courses about Europe, especially, in politics and democracy; they are rare courses and professors who have specific skills in Western. Besides, to create a free European club gathering those who are interested in Western countries to learn languages used in Europe, histories, politics, and so on is my passion. After I graduate, I dream to focus on politics especially about Europe so I can be a volunteer professor in my university while I also work on improving R democracy

R does need helps. I cannot change the past, as the elite changed to democracy, however, I can still change the future.

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