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Anita_a Posted 21 years ago

My Love For You

My life
My love
My ecstasy
My passion
My affection
My heartbeat
My breath
My glances
My touch
My being
My soul
Are all for you.
Won’t you just
Give me your heart
In return?
  

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Hi, Anita, your poem is great! An interesting thing I've noticed in it - if you change the order of some lines, or, say, just take a couple of lines separately and end with the last four ones, it will still make sense. For instance, you can place the first two lines after "my soul" and it'll sound in a bit different way - as if you're proceeding from the details to the general things, saying that all above mentioned is a part of your love and life...

— Fair Lady

  • Hi, Anita, your poem is great!
  • An interesting thing I've noticed in it - if you change the order of some lines, or, say, just take a couple of lines separately and end with the last four ones, it will still make sense.
  • For instance, you can place the first two lines after "my soul" and it'll sound in a bit different way - as if you're proceeding from the details to the general things, saying that all above mentioned is a part of your love and life...
  • Really exciting.
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Hi, Anita,
your poem is great! An interesting thing I've noticed in it - if you change the order of some lines, or, say, just take a couple of lines separately and end with the last four ones, it will still make sense. For instance, you can place the first two lines after "my soul" and it'll sound in a bit different way - as if you're proceeding from the details to the general things, sayi
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Thanks Fair lady. That was really helpful... howz this?


My heartbeat
My breath
My glances
My touch
My affection
My ecstasy
My passion
My being
My soul
My life
My love
Are all for you.
Won’t you just
Give me your heart
In return?
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0 Nice one anita..and u agree with fair lady words.yes this what will improve ur life. 02br
00Ur's fan 02br
00chandru 0-
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0 Thanks Chandran. 0-
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0 great use of vocabulary! excellent job! a very heartfilled poem- Jess 0-
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0 Thanks Jess, for your encouraging words. I appreciate it. 0-
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0 You should let me love you 02br
00Let me be the one to show 02br
00you the way home 02br
00I need your protection 02br
00and affection and all your feelings 02br
00What you do to me reminds me 02br
00of a lost time. 02br
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anita_aWon’t you just Give me your heart In return?

Kakuzu: Here, I have spares.

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