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Sarahkuang Posted 20 years ago
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my journal---Proofreading please!
Hi, teachers
I try to write something to improve my writing. Would you please correct me that you think is not proper. Thanks!
Yesterday, I read some articles from BBC news about the life in Iraq. I was surprised to find that I had several misconceptions about Iraq. First they are not poor. They are rich. They have almost everything we have. They have cars, cell phones, computers and accession to inter net. Before 1991 war, they also had a lot of parties to go. Second, they eat pizza and hamburgers. I wonder do they have Chinese, Italian, French restaurants? Third, most of Iraq women work. They work as doctors, journalists, cooks, businesswomen… you name it.
What they don’t have now is security and electricity. Isn’t that irony that they lack of electricity? Iraq is one of the oil producing countries. Why does their nation grid have to shut down after evening? In Baghdad, most of houses connect to the private power firms to get power at night. When it comes to security, I think no one like Iraqian want it so badly. News about death in Iraq can be heard everyday. What kinds of life they have. I feel bad for them.
I try to write something to improve my writing. Would you please correct me that you think is not proper. Thanks!
Yesterday, I read some articles from BBC news about the life in Iraq. I was surprised to find that I had several misconceptions about Iraq. First they are not poor. They are rich. They have almost everything we have. They have cars, cell phones, computers and accession to inter net. Before 1991 war, they also had a lot of parties to go. Second, they eat pizza and hamburgers. I wonder do they have Chinese, Italian, French restaurants? Third, most of Iraq women work. They work as doctors, journalists, cooks, businesswomen… you name it.
What they don’t have now is security and electricity. Isn’t that irony that they lack of electricity? Iraq is one of the oil producing countries. Why does their nation grid have to shut down after evening? In Baghdad, most of houses connect to the private power firms to get power at night. When it comes to security, I think no one like Iraqian want it so badly. News about death in Iraq can be heard everyday. What kinds of life they have. I feel bad for them.
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a fast pass: __ means I erased a word --------------- Yesterday, I read some articles from BBC news about the life in Iraq. I was surprised to find that I had several misconceptions about Iraq. Firs t, t hey are not poor.
- a fast pass: __ means I erased a word --------------- Yesterday, I read some articles from BBC news about the life in Iraq.
- I was surprised to find that I had several misconceptions about Iraq.
- Firs t, t hey are not poor.
- They are rich.
- They have almost everything we have.
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a fast pass:
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Yesterday, I read some articles from BBC news about the life in Iraq. I was surprised to find that I had several misconceptions about Iraq. First, they are not poor. They ar
__ means I erased a word
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Yesterday, I read some articles from BBC news about the life in Iraq. I was surprised to find that I had several misconceptions about Iraq. First, they are not poor. They ar
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Thank you.
A few questions?
Why did you?
1. write "most of the Iraqi women" and "most of Iraqi women"? Isn't the "most of the somethings/someones" means the somethings or someones who have a prior reference? What is the difference between the two?
Most of the Iraqi women ...
Most of Iraqi women ...
2. Can we say "they eat pizzas and hamburgers,
A few questions?
Why did you?
1. write "most of the Iraqi women" and "most of Iraqi women"? Isn't the "most of the somethings/someones" means the somethings or someones who have a prior reference? What is the difference between the two?
Most of the Iraqi women ...
Most of Iraqi women ...
2. Can we say "they eat pizzas and hamburgers,
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Thank you very much
. Sorry Believer I can not give any answer to your question. Maybe someone out there can.
. Sorry Believer I can not give any answer to your question. Maybe someone out there can.0
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