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Netming2000 Posted 16 years ago
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My grammatical errors. Thanks
I am writing an essay. Could you guys point out my grammar errors. Many thanks.
1.Sometime, it hurts the wife's feeling because she is reluctant to play a role that is low and degrading in our human character. Also, it shows how much the husbands love care for their wives because if a husband care for the wife's feeling, he will not force her to play such act. Pornography would ruin a relationship and trusts among partners.
2.I asked her if she would be mad if I watched pornography. She said yes, because she hated whenever I looked at other women. Especially, she was emotionally feeling that she did not satisfied me enough than the women in the pornography.
3. For example, I spent 1 hours playing computer games four times a week; accordingly, it would be 1920 hours in ten years. In this 1920 hours, one could really use the time for something wisely and productively. If I could have chosen, I would choose to use this 1920 hours for studying, instead of using the time for a waste. Computer game had a huge impact on my life; it influenced my life deeply. Now that I would told myself to avoid to play computer game.
1.Sometime, it hurts the wife's feeling because she is reluctant to play a role that is low and degrading in our human character. Also, it shows how much the husbands love care for their wives because if a husband care for the wife's feeling, he will not force her to play such act. Pornography would ruin a relationship and trusts among partners.
2.I asked her if she would be mad if I watched pornography. She said yes, because she hated whenever I looked at other women. Especially, she was emotionally feeling that she did not satisfied me enough than the women in the pornography.
3. For example, I spent 1 hours playing computer games four times a week; accordingly, it would be 1920 hours in ten years. In this 1920 hours, one could really use the time for something wisely and productively. If I could have chosen, I would choose to use this 1920 hours for studying, instead of using the time for a waste. Computer game had a huge impact on my life; it influenced my life deeply. Now that I would told myself to avoid to play computer game.
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Hello, netming-- and welcome to English Forums. I have underlined some problem areas and crossed out inappropriate verbiage: 1. Sometime, it hurts the wife's feeling because she is reluctant to play a role that is low and degrading in our human character .
- Hello, netming-- and welcome to English Forums.
- I have underlined some problem areas and crossed out inappropriate verbiage: 1.
- Sometime, it hurts the wife's feeling because she is reluctant to play a role that is low and degrading in our human character .
- Also, it shows how much the husbands love care for their wives because if a husband care for the wife's feeling , he will not force her to play such act .
- *********** would ruin a relationship and trusts among partners.
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Hello, netming-- and welcome to English Forums. I have underlined some problem areas and crossed out inappropriate verbiage:
1.Sometime, it hurts the wife's feeling because she is reluctant to play a role that is low and degradingin our human character. Also, it shows how much the husbands love care for their wives because if a
1.Sometime, it hurts the wife's feeling because she is reluctant to play a role that is low and degrading
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Thank you so much. Here is my revision to my first question. Thanks!
Sometime it hurts a wife's feeling because she is reluctant to play a role that is low and degrading. It can show how much a husband is loving and caring for his wife, instead of treating his wife like an animal. If a husband cares for a wife's feeling, he will not force her to play such an act.
Sometime it hurts a wife's feeling because she is reluctant to play a role that is low and degrading. It can show how much a husband is loving and caring for his wife, instead of treating his wife like an animal. If a husband cares for a wife's feeling, he will not force her to play such an act.
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I have made some further corrections:
Sometime it hurts a wife's feelings because she is reluctant to play a role that is low and degrading. It can show how much a husband loves and cares for his wife, instead of treating his wife like an animal. If a husband cares for his wife's feelings, he will not force her to perform such an act.
Sometime it hurts a wife's feelings because she is reluctant to play a role that is low and degrading. It can show how much a husband loves and cares for his wife, instead of treating his wife like an animal. If a husband cares for his wife's feelings, he will not force her to perform such an act.
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Thanks. I have learned a lot.
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