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MyPrecious Posted 21 years ago

My First poem............... !!!

0 "In the Maid of the mist we travelled, 02br
00 To the midst of the misty famed falls, 02br
00With fog smothering the surroundings, 02br
00 Froth rubbing the Maid’s edges. 02br
00There I see a bird in the hustle and bustle of the Mist, 02br
00 Gliding without a care in the world, 02br
00Touched and swirled by the gushing wind of water, 02br
00 “O’God what a creation” exclaimed I, 02br
00O Mother Nature unfolding the beauty in you, 02br
00 You make us happy, 02br
00Destroying your splendor, we repay you !!!” 02br
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00Waiting for raves and rants !!! Brickbats !! Tomatoes..and whatever !!! 02br
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0Ah, my Preciousss, we misssses it, we doezzz.... 02br 02br 02br 00Not bad for a first try, MP. Now, please tell me a couple of things: 02br 02br 00(1) Why do you have a mist in this poem?

— Mister Micawber

  • 0Ah, my Preciousss, we misssses it, we doezzz....
  • 02br 02br 02br 00Not bad for a first try, MP.
  • Now, please tell me a couple of things: 02br 02br 00(1) Why do you have a mist in this poem?
  • How can a mist hustle or bustle?
  • How could a bird caught in a mist not be worried about its orientation?
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0Ah, my Preciousss, we misssses it, we doezzz.... 02br
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0 Welcome, Precious, and 01b00congratulations on your first post and your first poem.02b00 I had a sense of isolation in the mist, with a sudden surprise at the bird rising, and a recognition of man's smallness in the splendour of the world. 02br
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0 P.S. MM 01i00hates02i00emoticons, so I expect he's popped out to order a whole truck full of tomatoes to lob at me! 050010id5
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0 Hello Abbie and MM, 02br
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00 Appreciate your comments. Well Abbie you got it right. I have been to Niagara during Memorial Day long weekend and was overwhelmed by the beauty of that place. I am no poet but wanted to bring out the emotions in me through some words. Agreed that my vocab is not even 0.1% but as everybody I want to improve !!! 02br
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00There I see a bird in the hustle and bustle of the Mist.12blockquote
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00I'd be inclined to disagree with MM and Abbie. I quite like the h&b in this line. It's nicely ambiguous. 02br
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