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Hi, I`m just exercising my English language and chose some text to translate (this is regulations of one website in my (Slovak) language. I just finished and wanted to give you to check (I hope you understand my request). Please check text below and check grammatical errors and check if my translation make sense. THANK YOU :*

1. If you want to sell your car – use valuation form (click here) – enter indispensable details and receive our free valuation within 24 hrs.
2. Our valuation is free and does not commit to anything.
3. We do not need your precise details at the stage of valuation. Country and city are necessary details to determine value of refundable deposit.
4. Your valuation will be ready within 24 hrs.
5. Information about your prepared valuation you will get by e-mail entered in valuation form. You can also check your valuation status on our website by entering valuation number.
6. If our valuation suits you – enter the rest of your details: name, surname, exact address of the place of the car collection. After submit the form you will receive e-mail from us with confirmation. We will call you and inform you about date of collection.
7. If the date of collection is not convenient for you – we will adjust to you and determine more convenient date.
8. We always try to arrange collection schedule in order that the person who comes to collect your car speaks in your language, you do not have to be afraid that you will not make yourself understood.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

AmyS chose some text to translate (this is regulations of one website in my (Slovak) language.

Welcome to English Forums.
You could have chosen something more interesting and natural than formal legal language!

1. If you want to sell your car – use our valuation form (click here) – enter indispensable details and you will receive our free valuation within 24 hrs.
2. Our valuation is free and does not commit you to anything.
3. We do not need your precise details at the stage of the valuation. Country and city are necessary ~~details~~ to determine value of refundable deposit. (?? You said it was free. What is this deposit? Why is the deposit being valued? Isn't it a given amount of money?)
4. Your valuation will be ready within 24 hrs.
5. Information about the ~~prepared~~ valuation ~~you will get by~~ will be sent to the e-mail address entered on the valuation form. You can also check your valuation status on our website by entering the valuation number.
6. If our valuation suits you – enter the rest of your details: name, surname, exact address of the ~~place of the~~ car's location ~~collection~~. After you submit the form you will receive e-mail from us with a confirmation. We will call you and inform you ~~about~~ of the date of collection.
7. If the date of collection is not convenient for you – we will adjust ~~to you~~ it and determine a more convenient date.
8. We always try to arrange our collection schedule in order that the person who comes to collect your car speaks in your language, you do not have to be afraid that you will not make yourself understood.

AmyS · Answer

Hi, thank you for help, I chose this kind of text because seemed difficult for me, I mean this kind of text is "bothersome" in that respect. That`s why i chose it.

what do you think about my English? Did I do lots of serious errors?

AlpheccaStars · Answer

AmySwhat do you think about my English? Did I do lots of serious errors?

What do you think about my English?
It's quite good.

Did I make lots of serious errors?

No, but you made lots of little mistakes. If you practice, and get feedback on your errors, you will quickly learn your weaknesses, and learn how to avoid making these errors.

AmyS · Answer

my another scribble - will you check?

1. Our drivers who come to collect your car do not negotiate prices. They come to collect cars, settle financial and others issues, load the car and leave.
2. If our client wants to sell more than one car we try to arrange collection by one driver (if a truck is enough big).
3. We inform our clients about the collection date by phone (or e-mail if you do not speak English) and a driver sent by us to collect your car will call you one day before collection to determine time of collection.
4. Collection of your time depends on others collection – it means that we want to arrange the whole set of cars and then we send a driver. We come on average to collect cars within 7 days.
5. We do not negotiate prices with our clients, our drivers have no right to negotiate price or pay more than predetermined price.
6. The driver who comes to collect the car checks basic technical requirements of selling car. If your car does not meet basic requirements or the car is completely different than in your description/photos/assurances – our driver has right to refuse to collect your car.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

AmySmy another scribble - will you check?

No. You cannot use both "my" and "another" together. These words are both determiners. This is a common error for learners.
- Another scribble (of mine)
- my second scribble

You need a lot of practice with using determiners - the, a

1. Our drivers who come to collect your car do not negotiate prices. They come to collect cars, settle financial and others (“other” is used before plural or uncountable nouns; "others" is a pronoun.) issues, load the car and leave.

2. If our client wants to sell more than one car, we try to arrange collection by one driver (if their truck is big enough ~~big~~).

3. We inform our clients of the collection date by phone (or e-mail if you do not speak English) and a driver will be sent ~~by us~~ to collect your car. We will call you the day before collection to determine the time of collection.

4. Your collection ~~of your~~ time depends on other collection times– it means that we want to arrange to collect a whole set of cars before ~~and then~~ we send a driver. We come on average to collect cars within 7 days.
5. We do not negotiate prices with our clients, our drivers have no right to negotiate the price or pay more than a predetermined price.
6. The driver who comes to collect the car checks the basic technical condition ~~requirements~~ of the ~~selling~~ car. If your car does not meet basic requirements or the car is completely different than in your description/photos/assurances – our driver has the right to refuse to collect your car.

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