My essay on rural depopulation

Thank you dear teechr.

teechrwould be

I think it should now be 'would not', with the corrections you made.

I have written two introductions as I was not sure which one would live up to your expectations.

AlpheccaStars said I must include a summary of the solutions, so with that setup, I did it thus:

Throughout history, people have always been in search of better living conditions, migrating from place to place or establishing permanent residences far from their birthplace. Today’s continuing exodus towards large urban areas is no exception. It has negatively impacted both the quality of our life and the environment. Two main solutions are in order to combat the problem: encouraging employment and improving public services in rural communities.

And you said I must start from a general sentence, go into detail, and give my position. I came up with the following accordingly.

Nowadays, many rural people choose to transfer to neighboring large cities in search of a comfortable life. They ordinarily leave the countryside due to financial reasons as well as poor public services in their regions. Governments should address these issues to relocate rural regions, whose depopulation will breed adverse outcomes discussed below.