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Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
Letter Writing
My college applicatoin essay
0 Could any one can help me to revise this paragraph?Thank you. 02 br
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00 The college asks me to choose an extracurricular activity I have to describe. 02 br
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00 Here is my draft: 02 br
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00 I was used to be a President of class in high school. I could contact with more people and listen to more opinions by working in this position. Listening provides a good leadership. Being a good listener is an important skill to survive in a college. In the classes, I listen to professor; when communicate with classmates, I listen to their opinions. As a new comer in this country, listen to others become more necessary to me. Listening means thinking, because I can analysis what others think; listening means speaking, in order to let people listen to me, I should be a good listener first; listening means learning, since I can learn from others speeches. College is a place where I prepare myself for this small community and in future for the big world. 0-
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00 The college asks me to choose an extracurricular activity I have to describe. 02 br
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00 Here is my draft: 02 br
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00 I was used to be a President of class in high school. I could contact with more people and listen to more opinions by working in this position. Listening provides a good leadership. Being a good listener is an important skill to survive in a college. In the classes, I listen to professor; when communicate with classmates, I listen to their opinions. As a new comer in this country, listen to others become more necessary to me. Listening means thinking, because I can analysis what others think; listening means speaking, in order to let people listen to me, I should be a good listener first; listening means learning, since I can learn from others speeches. College is a place where I prepare myself for this small community and in future for the big world. 0-
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0 Highlighting shows some amendments and other areas you need to take another look at. I'm not sure if 'listening' counts as an extracirrucular activity. 02 br 02 br 00 I 00 was used 00 to be 00 a President of class in high school.
- 0 Highlighting shows some amendments and other areas you need to take another look at.
- I'm not sure if 'listening' counts as an extracirrucular activity.
- 02 br 02 br 00 I 00 was used 00 to be 00 a President of class in high school.
- I could 00 contact 00 with 00 more 00 people and listen to 00 more 00 opinions by working in this position.
- 00 Listening provides a good leadership 00 .
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0 Highlighting shows some amendments and other areas you need to take another look at. I'm not sure if 'listening' counts as an extracirrucular activity. You should describe the presidency in wider detail, not just one aspect of it. 02 br
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00 I 00 was used 00 to be 00 a President of class in high school. I could 00 contact 00 with 00 more 00 people and li
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00 I 00 was used 00 to be 00 a President of class in high school. I could 00 contact 00 with 00 more 00 people and li
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