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Sitifatimahmurtaza Posted 20 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
MY CHILDHOOD DAYS...PLEASE CHECK MY ESSAY
MY CHILDHOOD DAYS
I still remember some of the wonderful memories when I was young. I lived with my grandparents since I was eight-year-old as my parents had been busy with their business. My grandparents lived in a beautiful wooden, colourful house with five rooms only. The front lawn was kept clean and bare. At the back, though my grandmother had planted a number of vegetables for our consumption, there was also a chicken coop and a barn for the cows. My growing up years were often spent playing and exploring. I used to play soldiers, police and thief, and hide and seek with my playmates around grandfather's land. My grandfather,on the other hand,taught me about the plants and how to look after them. My grandmother was a good cook and I remembered hanging around the kitchen to help. I really enjoyed making 'kuih baulu' and frying the 'roti canai'. During those days,we seldom watched television as we were just busy having fun doing other things. Besides,My grandfather also planted many kind of fruit trees such a rambutan,papaya,durian,mangosteen and guava. My favourite was a rambutan tree which grew to look like a giant. I really had a great time staying with my grandparents. I used to wish that these moments would never end. I would always cherish the beautiful memories of my childhood days.
I still remember some of the wonderful memories when I was young. I lived with my grandparents since I was eight-year-old as my parents had been busy with their business. My grandparents lived in a beautiful wooden, colourful house with five rooms only. The front lawn was kept clean and bare. At the back, though my grandmother had planted a number of vegetables for our consumption, there was also a chicken coop and a barn for the cows. My growing up years were often spent playing and exploring. I used to play soldiers, police and thief, and hide and seek with my playmates around grandfather's land. My grandfather,on the other hand,taught me about the plants and how to look after them. My grandmother was a good cook and I remembered hanging around the kitchen to help. I really enjoyed making 'kuih baulu' and frying the 'roti canai'. During those days,we seldom watched television as we were just busy having fun doing other things. Besides,My grandfather also planted many kind of fruit trees such a rambutan,papaya,durian,mangosteen and guava. My favourite was a rambutan tree which grew to look like a giant. I really had a great time staying with my grandparents. I used to wish that these moments would never end. I would always cherish the beautiful memories of my childhood days.
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Dear Sitifatimahmurtaza,
Avoid using "as" : use "because".
Here is my edition of your essay. These are only suggestions. Organization, however, is important - like when you speak of your grandfather, his plants and his trees. These thoughts belong together. Hope this helps. John
I still remember (still have) many wonderful memories from when I was young. From the
Avoid using "as" : use "because".
Here is my edition of your essay. These are only suggestions. Organization, however, is important - like when you speak of your grandfather, his plants and his trees. These thoughts belong together. Hope this helps. John
I still remember (still have) many wonderful memories from when I was young. From the
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Really very fine and such a nice memorable moments for all. You explained in smooth language. It touches our heart.
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I found so many spelling mistakes in this but it was really nice and inter to read and write really easy
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