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Yohooo8 Posted 22 years ago
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Mohan,
This is my entry today, please edit it for me. I would love to take your edited copy to compare mine. I can truly improve my writing by look at yours and mine.
9-2
3:00 pm
One client called me yesterday said her computer needs some help and she is around the Fremont area. I work in Fremont, so I made an appointment with her next day on my lunch hour. I got there little bit early since it is really close to my work place. It’s an shared apartment building with many units . The client wasn’t home when I go there, but her daughter was there. After a intro conversation with her daughter, I knew she is 21 and was from Beijing. I thought so too from her heavy Beijing accents. She talks fast and less friendly. She is also a very straight forward girl from how she talks. I was little nervous first from her serious face. And I was also little bit uncomfortable when she was standing behind me while I was fixing her computer.
The reason for the visit is because she needs Chinese system both read and input on her computer. Someone has already installed NJstar for her and she doesn’t like it at all. So I figured a better way to let her input Chinese in a English windows. I also have done some encoding job on the windows too. Everything was done on the time, so I left the place. After drive 2 blocks I left her place, she calls me again said she needs a Quang ping instead of Shuang ping. When I trying to left her place, she asks me if she can have her windows erase and install her Chinese version windows, she doesn’t mind to pay me more. I refused. I told her please do not use Chinese windows at her age in the United States. I know she has language difficulties when she is working her computer, but I am sure she’ll be ok later. It is also very benefited to her job later. No such company will ever use Chinese windows, so she just have to deal with the English windows since she is in the united states. I have explained why I denied her request and she agreed. She gave me smile after for the first since I was there for the whole hour. I feel so good later even I didn’t make that additional money.
This is my entry today, please edit it for me. I would love to take your edited copy to compare mine. I can truly improve my writing by look at yours and mine.
9-2
3:00 pm
One client called me yesterday said her computer needs some help and she is around the Fremont area. I work in Fremont, so I made an appointment with her next day on my lunch hour. I got there little bit early since it is really close to my work place. It’s an shared apartment building with many units . The client wasn’t home when I go there, but her daughter was there. After a intro conversation with her daughter, I knew she is 21 and was from Beijing. I thought so too from her heavy Beijing accents. She talks fast and less friendly. She is also a very straight forward girl from how she talks. I was little nervous first from her serious face. And I was also little bit uncomfortable when she was standing behind me while I was fixing her computer.
The reason for the visit is because she needs Chinese system both read and input on her computer. Someone has already installed NJstar for her and she doesn’t like it at all. So I figured a better way to let her input Chinese in a English windows. I also have done some encoding job on the windows too. Everything was done on the time, so I left the place. After drive 2 blocks I left her place, she calls me again said she needs a Quang ping instead of Shuang ping. When I trying to left her place, she asks me if she can have her windows erase and install her Chinese version windows, she doesn’t mind to pay me more. I refused. I told her please do not use Chinese windows at her age in the United States. I know she has language difficulties when she is working her computer, but I am sure she’ll be ok later. It is also very benefited to her job later. No such company will ever use Chinese windows, so she just have to deal with the English windows since she is in the united states. I have explained why I denied her request and she agreed. She gave me smile after for the first since I was there for the whole hour. I feel so good later even I didn’t make that additional money.
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9-2 10pm I was very nervous after get off from work. It’s my first day to give lesson to my student Christopher Banh. I was 15 min late due to traffic condition at off work time period.
- 9-2 10pm I was very nervous after get off from work.
- It’s my first day to give lesson to my student Christopher Banh.
- I was 15 min late due to traffic condition at off work time period.
- I was actually prepare the lesson yesterday night for half hrs.
- I outline the contents and analyze where to tech him from.
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9-2
10pm
I was very nervous after get off from work. It’s my first day to give lesson to my student Christopher Banh. I was 15 min late due to traffic condition at off work time period. I was actually prepare the lesson yesterday night for half hrs. I outline the contents and analyze where to tech him from. I need to tech him 2 days a week, and one hour each day for the next 2 s
10pm
I was very nervous after get off from work. It’s my first day to give lesson to my student Christopher Banh. I was 15 min late due to traffic condition at off work time period. I was actually prepare the lesson yesterday night for half hrs. I outline the contents and analyze where to tech him from. I need to tech him 2 days a week, and one hour each day for the next 2 s
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