MY BELOVED FATHER

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Wan Mohammad b. Wan Ahmad is the most important person in my life.U know why ?Because without him surely i was did not born in this world.He is my beloved father which is 43 years old.He is  approximately 173 cm tall and  he's weight is about 73 kg.He has llight skin,sharp nose, and have a nice dark hair.His hobby are fishing and reading.Sometimes when he was holiday he would brougth my family went to some activities likes fishing and picnic.For me he is the best father in the  world,caring,kindly ,hardworking,loving,responsible and all of good habits was for him.You know i was so lucky to be his daughter because of him i became a good person and so responsible.Every moment,when i need him he always nearest to me.I never felt that my father was far away from me.If i had the problems  i would told my father and he always tried his best to help me to solve the problems.For him ,family is the most important thing in his life.When i was small he said to me that ,whatever happened,whatever time whatever reasoned , his family always in his heart.He had never scolded and beat me.He just gave the useful adviced and as his daughter i would  never forgot his adviced.He always advice me to be a good person,followed his adviced,and be kindly to all the person because we are the same.nothing is different between us.But the most important thing that i must do is help the poor person and dont tried to make the gate between them..they also a peson like us have a feeling ,a nice heart and a intelelektual brains.That is my father

Davkett · Accepted Answer

Not bad at all for an English learner, KUrUs. Always capitalize the word 'I'. Commas go directly after a word, with the space after the comma. A period is followed by two spaces. I made most of the verbs in the present tense. I hope my corrections below will help.

Wan Mohammad b. Wan Ahmad is the most important person in my life. Do you know why? Without him, I surely would not have been born into this world. He is my beloved father, 43 years old. He is approximately 173 cm. tall and his weight is about 73 kg. He has light skin, a sharp nose, and nice dark hair. His hobbies are fishing and reading. Sometimes, on holidays, he would bring along the family for activities like fishing and picnicking. For me, he is the best father in the world, caring, kindly, hardworking, loving and responsible. I am so lucky to be his daughter. Because of him, I became a good person and very responsible. Every moment when I need him, he is always near to me. I never feel that my father is far away from me. If I have problems, I will tell my father and he will always try his best to help me solve them. For him, family is the most important thing in his life. When I was small, he said to me that whatever will happen, whatever the time, whatever the reasons, his family will always be in his heart. He has never scolded or beat me. He just gives useful advice. As his daughter, I will never forget his advice. He always advises me to be a good person, to follow his advice, and to be kind to everyone, because we are all the same. Nothing is different between us. But the most important thing that I must do is help poor people and try not to make any barriers that separate us. They have feelings, good hearts and minds, just like us. That is my father.

Lynnlin · Answer

Not bad at all for an English learner, KUrUs. Always capitalize the word 'I'. Commas go directly after a word, with the space after the comma. A period is followed by two spaces. I made most of the verbs in the present tense. I hope my corrections below will help.

Hi Davkett

You are always kind and patient.

Regards

MY BELOVED FATHER

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