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Anita_a Posted 21 years ago

My Alluring Self

Not a word on my lips
Not a thing in my soul
Where does my mind lead me?
In this world whole.

No talking to friends
No botheration of foes
Where is my enthusiasm gone?
Leaving me only with woes.

I want to be back
I want to find myself
Where do I go from here?
In search of my alluring Self.
  

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Good title! ). 'Self' is a very difficult word.

  • Good title!
  • ).
  • 'Self' is a very difficult word.
  • Emily D.
  • rhymes it with 'shelf', I think, in a couple of places; sometimes writers in the past have desperately made a rhyme with 'elf', which is never a happy compromise.
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Good title!

I'm not sure about lines 4 and 8: there's a slight awkwardness about the inversion in 4, and line 8 has a different rhythm (does it need to lose a couple of syllables, do you think?).

'Self' is a very difficult word. Emily D. rhymes it with 'shelf', I think, in a couple of places; sometimes writers in the past have desperately made a rhyme with 'elf', which is nev
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Not a word on my lips
Not a word in my soul
Where does my mind lead me?
Into this world's shelf.

No talking to friends
No talking of foes
Where is my enthusiasm gone?
Leaving me with worries' elf.

I want to be back
I want to be myself
Where do I go from here?
In search of my Self.

Maybe the whole rhyming can be

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