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I seriously don’t understand why  again and again demanding evidences to prove that the Mumbai attackers were his nationalist. The world knows this, tv channels are beaming it on its screens. Journalist from around the world has made a trip to kasad’s village – the lone terrorist who had been caught alive. The Kasad’s father himself had admitted that he is his son, its all open in front of everyone. Just banning the allege outfit does not ends the road to terrorism,  needs to prove to the world that he is a responsible state and genuinely fighting a war against terrorism. It’s a great opportunity for  to send a strong signal to world by stringently acting against all the elements present in the country; so called stateless actor, who wreak havoc and mayhem around the world. Hope Pakistan will do something beyond a token of gesture.

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I ~~seriously~~ don’t understand why Pakistan again and again demanding evidences to prove that the Mumbai attackers were his nationalist. The world knows this, tv channels are beaming it on its screens. Journalist from around the world has made a trip to kasad’s village – the lone terrorist who had been caught alive. The Kasad’s father himself had admitted that he is his son, its all ~~open~~ ~~in front of~~ everyone. Just banning the allege outfit does not ends the ~~road to~~ terrorism, Pakistan needs to prove to the world that he is a responsible state and genuinely fighting a war against terrorism. It’s a great opportunity for Pakistan to send a strong signal to world by ~~stringently~~ acting against all the elements present in the country; so called stateless ~~actor~~, who wreak havoc and mayhem around the world. Hope Pakistan will do something beyond a token of gesture.
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I don’t understand why again and again is demanding evidence to prove that the Mumbai attackers were his nationalists. The world have witnessed everything, tv channels are beaming it on the screens. Journalists from around the world have visited Kasab’s village – the lone terrorist captured alive. The Kasab’s father himself has admitted that Kasab is his son. Just banning the alleged outfit does not end terrorism. needs to prove the world that it is a responsible state and genuinely fighting a war against terrorism. It’s a great opportunity for to send a strong signal to the world by acting against the anti-democratic elements present in the country,

Lakshwadeep · Answer

CreativeguruI improved upon it kindly check
I don’t understand why Pakistan again and again is demanding evidence to prove ~~that~~ the Mumbai attackers were its nationals. [if you meant nationalists, then leave it]
The world has witnessed everything; tv channels are beaming it on the screens. [use semicolons for separating two independent clauses]
Journalists from around the world have visited Kasab’s – the lone terrorist captured alive – village. [make the dashed part closer to the word it, in this case "Kasab", is modifying]
Kasab’s father himself has admitted that Kasab is his son. Just banning the alleged outfit does not end terrorism. [the "The" before "Kasab's father" is not needed]
Pakistan needs to prove to the world that it is a responsible state and genuinely fighting a war against terrorism.
It’s a great opportunity for Pakistan to send a strong signal to the world by acting against the anti-democratic elements present in the country. [you could change "in the country" to "in it" because the word "pakistan" was already in the sentence]

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