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Hi, can someone help me. Are these grammatically correct?

1. When demons and monsters attack the home of the Monkey King, he must set out on a journey to protect his family and uncover a dark conspiracy that looks to destroy the world!

2. Wanted is a story set in the mysterious dark web. Filled with amazing flying car, be ready to be amazed by the incredible stunts in the movie!

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anonymous1. When demons and monsters attack the home of the Monkey King, he must set out on a journey to protect his family and uncover a dark conspiracy that looks to destroy the world!

Good.

anonymous2. Wanted is a story set in the mysterious dark web. Filled with amazing flying cars, be ready to be amazed by the incredible stunts in the movie!

1. I'm assuming Wanted is a movie title. That's not how it looks when you don't italicize it. It makes the reader think that somebody wants a story, and that makes the sentence confusing.

2. "filled with" implies more than one car. I'm guessing that's just a typo.

3. "be ready" is an imperative, so the implicit subject is "you". Placing the "filled with" clause just before it says something like "You are filled with amazing flying cars, so be ready to be amazed ..."

It's the movie that has the cars, not you (the reader), so you need to make the word order do the work of clarifying this.

Filled with flying cars, this movie will amaze you with its incredible stunts.

Note that you dilute the effect of a word when you use it more than once in a short amount of space. The same is true of words which are just different forms of the same verb (amazing, amazed). For this reason, you should remove amazing from the description of the flying cars as I have done above.

CJ

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