motivational letter for university, feedback please

Hello everyone! Please help me with motivational letter. English is not my first language and I have never written motivational letter, so I someone could have a look it would be great. Thank you:)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I appreciate this opportunity to provide further background information in support of my application for entrance to your university to for the 2012 autumn term.

At the moment I am pursuing a career in nursing at PWSZ. Due to the current field of my studies, I have got a chance to deepen my existing interests as well as to develop new ones. As my major shows, I put emphasis on the concept of personal health and well beings of others. I learnt to look beyond symptoms to see the whole patients-mind, body and spirit. However, attending specific courses like anatomy and pshisiology fascinated me how incredible is human body and aspired to expand my current knowledge.

I moved to the United States at young age. Adjusting to new culture and envirnoment with no knowledge of English language was difficult, however with hard work I was able to move this obstacle. This shows that I am hard working and motivated indivdual. I was able learn english quickly and became a top student. I am aware that while working with patients ethical issues of privacy, confidentiality and cultural sensitivity are addressed. Traveling and getting to know others cultures helped me develop those skills. I understand that every patient has different hierarchy of values and we need to respect them.

I find that I learnt much from my volonteer work. During high school, while volontureeing at Putnam Hospital Center in New York I gained great deal of experience in medical field. However, studying nursing helped me expend my view on the whole service system.Having interships at varied clinical settings and working directly with patients have shaped my decision-making and clinical judgment skills. I am able to use prior kowledge to help people.

I am confident that with my strong will to give my best to everything I undertake and experience, I can say with modesty that I can contribute much to the program. Through the current challenging times, I understand that in order to reach my goals, apart from hard work, I have to obtain a solid education foundation that will provide me with a perspective and will allow me to pursue my dreams of entering a medical field and contributing to its benefit.

I hope this letter will be given your full consideration and I will be happy to provide any further information you may require.

Your sincerely,