Motivation letter.Please suggest grammar.Any advise welcomed.

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00I am writing to apply for a place on a part-time course XXXXX at XX University and would like to discuss reasons and motivation behind my choice. I also would like to explain my current circumstances in regard to the application.02br
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00I was born and grew up in Belarus but currently live with my husband, who is EU citizen, in the UK. I take great interest in understanding of the fundamental principals, theories, mechanisms that govern modern day economy in general and an extensive knowledge of the financial sector and its concerns in particular.02br
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00Before I moved to the UK, for a period of 3 years between ( dates here) I was a full-time student at Belarusian State Agricultural Academy in Belarus. I was studying for a Bachelor degree in Economics and Finance. The course provided me with a solid grasp of economic theory, applied economics and statistical techniques as well as in-depth knowledge of critical concepts in finance, economics and business. Whilst at Belarusian State Agricultural Academy I also acquired good knowledge of mathematics and bookkeeping. 02br
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00I sorely enjoyed studying Economics and Finance course and was really upset when due to some family circumstances I had to move out of the country and leave my course incomplete. 02br
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00After moving to the UK I’ve decided that I will do everything possible to complete my studies here. My greatest dream is to pursue a career in Economics and Finance. To make a first step toward my dream I had to improve my language skills. I therefore applied for the English as a Foreign Language Course at Edgware Academy of Languages in London. The course helped me develop the ability to communicate effectively in English by improving grammatical knowledge, language skills and confidence.02br
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00The XXXX University has a great reputation of high quality teaching. I sincerely believe that the opportunity to continue and complete University Degree course at your University will help me to satisfy my strong ambitions to land a successful career in Finance an Economics. 02br
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00I would be really grateful if you could review enclosed documents and give me an opportunity to make a credit transfer for my previous study toward ÖÖÖÖ.University XXXX degree. Please advise me what else has to be done from my side to make a credit transfer possible. 02br
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00I hope this information and my documents will help to make a positive and fair decision and give me a chance to receive an excellent education and qualification for my professional future.02br
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00Please do not hesitate to contact me should you require any more information. Thank you very much for your kind attention. Looking forward to hearing from you.02br
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00Yours faithfully, 0-