Motivation letter to the universities

Hello!

I want to apply for 2 Universities at animal behaviour speciality(undergraduate). I've wrote my motivation letter but I don't know if it's right way to write this because this is my firtst time. Can you help me to check out and give some advice to make it better? Please help me fast, deadline is already next week.

Here is my motivation letter:

Dear Sir/Madam,

I’m Triinu, from Tallinn, capital of Estonia and I’m 23 years old.

I want to study animal behaviour speciality to work as an animal behaviourist one day. In Estonia we have veterinarians who treat animals when they are physically sick. But we have nobody who tells pet owners what to do when dog is barking all day long or how to handle cat who is angry. I want to bring those skills into Estonia to help our pet owners with troubles. I have strong passion and intrest to animals for all of my life. I was wanted to be veterinary and I learned this at Eesti Maaülikool for one year. I had voluntary practice opportunity with Estonian famous and leading veterinary clinic. I assisted veterinary doctors at Tiina Toomet’s Pet Clinic. This was very exciting, but through this I understood that something is missing. Treating animals was not for me, I was more intrested about how and why animals behave and for what reasons. In Estonia even veterinary students don’t have enough this subject.

Now I’m working and volunteering at Estonian Animal Welfare Society. I want to make more contribution to our society work to help handle difficult homeless animals problems. Like how to make street cats more social to give them for new owners, how to catch dogs from street who is running away. This for them I would do for free.

Ofcourse I wan’t to start with own business to help loving pet owners if their dog or cat is having some acting problem.

In England I wish to develop my point of view, to prove myselt to me, to fulfil my dream to work with animals as a acting therapyst, to have excellent English language skill, to see world and communicate with international students. I wan’t to know as much as it is possible to know about animal behaviour, communication, function, causes, development. Specificly I’m intrested about cats and dogs behaviour, training, teaching and problem solving.

As a national state exams I have done chemistry(43 points of 100), biology (61 points of 100) and english language(56 points of 100) exam. I’m going right now at english language preparation courses for IELTS international exam.

If you have any questions, you can contact me at .... or mobile +3725.....

Sincrealy yours,

Triinu Kann

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4.03.2010





waiting your advices and regards,

Triinu