Motivation Letter, review it please

Dear Sir or Madam:

My name is Nursultan Abishev, and I wish to apply for the undergraduate program in Business Administration by KIMEP’s Bang College of Business.

When I first heard that KIMEP offered the Central Asian Undergraduate Scholarship (CAUS), I did not hesitate and decided to apply immediately. Needless to say, I was very excited about this since it is something I sincerely want to do. It would be incredibly ill-advised for me to not pursue this great opportunity. There are two things I have always wanted to accomplish:
1) study in one of the best universities ofCentral Asia, which has an outstanding reputation throughout the world, and
2) visit Almaty – the financial and cultural center, not just ofKazakhstan, but of the entireCentral Asia.
Now, thanks to KIMEP, I can fulfill both dreams at once.

I am applying for the business and accounting program, since I am currently in the senior year of my bachelor program, which is “Management in Construction.” I am one of three people who received the free education grant among 60 entrants. Also, I was extremely fond of math my whole life, and that is why I love to solve any mathematical tasks. I believe this skill will benefit my future profession as an auditor. I am really looking forward to taking new courses and learning things I have previously never experienced. How once told me my teacher at lyceum: “Nursultan, you are very hardworking, smart and persistent person, you will achieve everything in your life, if you want it, just do it.” Now, it is the quote of my life. Just do it!

Being part of KIMEP will be an excellent opportunity to enhance my education further in finance, and it will help to improve my knowledge of English as well. By studying in a multinational university, I will have a better chance of accomplishing this here than anywhere else.

KIMEP offers such opportunities which other universities cannot. The options, after receiving my bachelor’s degree seem to be: to either seek a good job or to continue my education in one of the 75 international partnership universities of KIMEP. One thing I do know for sure is that I will be an excellent specialist, and in this way, I want to develop economic section not only of my country, also the whole Central Asia. I will be able to contribute to the enrichment of Central Asia.

Thank you in advance for considering my application. Please do not hesitate to contact me, if you need additional information. It will be a day to remember when I find myself in the grant list. I believe in myself, so please believe in me too.

Sincerely yours,

Nursultan Abishev.