Motivation Letter - Please help a first-timer out :)
1b00Hello EnglishForward.com!02b02br 00I have just started writing a motivation letter for my exchange term and I would appreciate some help and feedback. I am interested in the tiniest bit of critique, every comment is helpful.02br 00Thank you very much in advance, 05002br 02br 00/Carl Svensson02br 02br 01b01i00_______________________________________________________________________________________02i02br 02b02br 01b00Dear Sirs and Madams,02b02br 02br 00 I am writing to express my intent to spend one term of my education at XXX University, courses A, B & C. I am currently studying for a master’s degree in Business at the YYY University.02br 02br 00 I see myself as an open-minded, socially concerned and ambitious person that thrives in challenging and interesting environments. Since it has always been a matter of course for me to incorporate an international experience to my education, studying at one of Canada’s finest business schools would be a natural next step in my academic career. Canadian culture has always interested me, with its many similarities to the positive aspects of Swedish culture; a modern and progressive society with modern human values. I am positive that the Canadian mentality and way of life will make me feel comfortable and at home. 02br 02br 00 Being a person of high ambitions and a curious mind, I have always made sure to complement what we learn in class with work experience. My work experience includes a seasonal job at one of the largest banks in the Nordic countries, ZZZ. This job sparked a huge interest in Corporate Finance and Investments, areas where I see myself working upon completing my degree. In addition to this, I have been given the privilege to become ZZZ's contact with the student union, a responsibility I take great pride in. Other responsibilities include being elected by the students of the YYY University to the student union’s direction.02br 02br 00 As a member of the new and globally aware generation, I have always had an interest in international relations. Being an owner of a small company, I have close ties to suppliers from all over the world. The Canadian market is one of the largest and most important markets of the world, which makes it very interesting to become acquainted with for an entrepreneur. The Canadian market is also highly interesting from an investor’s point-of-view with, for example, its vast, unexploited energy resources. Canada is therefore a perfect country for me, both as an entrepreneur and as a future Corporate Financer/Investor, to live in and study.02br 02br 00I have always been both interested in and talented at the English language. Besides the compulsory studies in upper secondary school I have studied English on a university level prior to my current studies. I feel certain that my social and open personality combined with my genuine interest in both economics and the English language will be a great asset as a student at XXX University.02br 02br 00 Canada and XXX University are exactly the kind of challenging and interesting environments that I am searching for.02br 02br 00 Thanking you for considering my application and looking forward to your positive02br 02br 00 Yours faithfully,02br 02br 00 Carl Svensson010id1
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0 Hmm,02br 00No replies yet, but the thread still has 22 views... Even if you have the slightest tip, feel free to post it. 02br 02br 00/Carl0-
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0 Hmm,02br 00No replies yet, but the thread still has 22 views... Even if you have the slightest tip, feel free to post it. I really need your help.02br 02br 00/Carl0-
1b00Dear Sirs and Madams, (either Dear Sirs or Dear Sir/Madam)02b02br 02br 00 I am writing to express my intent to spend one term of my education at *** University, courses A, B & C.(This sounds slightly presumptuous - you are telling them that you are coming. Apply, don't tell them)00 I am currently studying for a master’s degree in Business at the YYY Uni
0 Thank you for your reply nona. 02br 00I am also interested in what you guys think of the letter, apart from the grammar etc. What could I do better in terms of "selling" myself without lying? What do you think about the letter in general?0-
0I thought it was a good letter; you seem to have covered all the relevant points without waffling.02br 02br 00Just a thought - Canada is a dual-language nation, with a large French speaking population as well as English. Are you sure the university is in the English 'area'? If it is in the French area then you might want to amend your letter a bit as you emphasise that you a