Motivation letter help pleae!

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00Never has anything fascinated me more than the workings of the human (and animal) body. The mechanisms that keep us healthy, or makes us ill, are a puzzle I can not wait to solve. Especially the human immune system interests me, as it is such a complex system of different types of cells interacting with the body and various organs to protect the organism. A better understanding of this system could lead us to the cause of auto-immune-diseases such as allergies and asthma.02br
00 It is my sincere hope to be a part of the progress in the field of biomedical sciences, progress made possible by researchers all over the world. How do medicines work and how can we make them better, more effective and user-friendlier? With these things I would like to occupy myself, to eventually make a difference in the way people are treated (and medicated) for their complaints. 02br
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00Searching for possibilities to broaden my horizon, I looked for universities abroad, offering the course of my choice. Due to possible language issues, my choice was between Italy (the country of my mother) and the United Kingdom. After careful consultation with my surroundings, and myself the latter came forth strongest.00 02br
00 That Scotland came out strongest was partly due to the fact that I have always found languages both fascinating and easy to apprehend (come June, I will have passed exams in 6 different languages, including ancient Greek and Latin, all with good results).02br
00 The chance to enhance my skills in English is one I seize with both hands, for the only way to learn a language properly is to actually go there and make an effort.02br
00 Another reason for my choice is my already knowing people there. I believe this will make the transition all the easier for me to move from Holland to Scotland02br
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00I am always looking for new challenges to develop myself further and my credo is: If you can do it and if you want to; you should.02br
00 I live in the Netherlands, where I attend the highest level of secondary education in Rotterdam and I will have my final examinations in (among others) Biology, Physics and Chemistry in May/June. My teachers know me to be eager to learn and open to a wide variety of subjects. My curiosity makes it easier for me to apprehend new things and consequently more and more attractive to continue expanding my knowledge.02br
00 My fellow pupils regularly ask me for help with their school work, because my grades are usually higher than most and I tend to understand new lessons fast. I always do my best to help people understand a subject better and it is something I do with pleasure.02br
00 When given an assignment, I am not easily contended with a piece of my work until I am absolutely certain there is nothing further I can do to improve it.02br
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00From the age of twelve I’ve been an enthusiastic volleyball player in my hometown; we regularly play competition matches with other teams from Rotterdam and other cities in the neighborhood. This long experience with team sport has taught me a great deal about working together with others in the pursuit of a common goal. 02br
00 I also have a great interest in literature, both Dutch and English. Hence, I will not shrink form a challenging (course)book or assignment; if anything, I would seize it as a chance to broaden my general development. This love for books and language has tempted me to study linguistics, but a wish for a more practical study made me defer from that.02br
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