Motivation letter-help needed!

Hello everybody! I am writing a letter of motivation to apply for a scholarship. Could you please revise it and tell me what i need to correct/change? Thanks a lot!

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am third-year law student at the Lomonosov Moscow State University and through this letter I would like to express my interest in applying for xxx scholarship for undergraduates.

Since my high school studies, I have always been interested in law, politics and international relations. Nowadays, our country is developing in many areas, such as science, agriculture and medicine, and feels a big need for specialists which will bring it forward. But progress of society wouldn’t be proper without good legislation and administration – that is why I have chosen to study law. Furthermore, learning foreign languages and studying abroad seems very important for me, as soon as today’s state is unthinkable without reliable international partners, which will be able to help when needed and share their experience.





During the past three years, I studied at the law faculty in Lomonosov Moscow State University with specialization in civil and business law. Alongside with it, I started studying German language as a foreign not only in university, but also while taking extra classes at Russian-German University of culture and science. As my interest in German law was growing, I took part in Regensburg University summer school for law students in 2009. Also I started studying German law within the bounds of DSG (Deutschsprachiger Studiengang) program, where I have already learned such subjects as commercial law, corporate law, penalty law. I find it very useful and important, because Russian and German legislation systems are very much alike and our native jurisprudence stem from continental and especially German law.

Participation in xxx program would let me acquire and extend my knowledge in the field of civil and German law studies. Moreover, I would be able to establish new relations with like-minded people and adopt their best practices. In my opinion, this is a great opportunity to achieve my main goals – studying Russian and European law in order to help people and organizations in their life and business relations. I have chosen University of T and University of H as they provide their students with the best opportunities and conditions to study and improve professional skills.

Thank you very much for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response.

Yours faithfully,

Anastasia.