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Letter Writing
Motivation Letter - HELP
hey guys, can you help me to correct mistakes (also content) in this letter? thanks so much!
Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is ... and I am currently studying at 8-year gymnasium in Prague. I would like to apply for AP Degree at UCN in Service, Hospitality & Tourism Management.
I have decided to apply for this programme, because tourism is actually the field where I would be happy to work. Travelling has always been a passion for me, I love discovering new countries, learning about new cultures and also getting the chance to realize how broad the world is. I think working in tourism industry would be suitable for me. Besides, when I am working on what really interests me, I put all my effort into it, I try to do my best.
In summer I had regularly taken part in an international theatre workshop in Germany which focuses on the development of creativity, team skills and it is also an excellent way how to improve English through collaboration on one theme. I gained various experience and learned to work in a multicultural teams.
I have been fascinated by the Scandinavia for many years which also supports my motivation to live and study in this country. Unfortunately, I have not had an opportunity to visit Denmark yet. This would be a unique chance to explore this country and experience the real Danish life.
To be honest, my plans were totally different. Few months ago, I was thinking of studying in Germany. But then I accidentally heard about study in Denmark and I spontaneously decided to change my plans because I was very impressed by the method of teaching and I realized it is an ideal school for me. Denmark offers me not only high quality of education but also a perfect opportunity to meet people all around the world. After all I love challenges and I would like to do something different from what I am used to.
Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is ... and I am currently studying at 8-year gymnasium in Prague. I would like to apply for AP Degree at UCN in Service, Hospitality & Tourism Management.
I have decided to apply for this programme, because tourism is actually the field where I would be happy to work. Travelling has always been a passion for me, I love discovering new countries, learning about new cultures and also getting the chance to realize how broad the world is. I think working in tourism industry would be suitable for me. Besides, when I am working on what really interests me, I put all my effort into it, I try to do my best.
In summer I had regularly taken part in an international theatre workshop in Germany which focuses on the development of creativity, team skills and it is also an excellent way how to improve English through collaboration on one theme. I gained various experience and learned to work in a multicultural teams.
I have been fascinated by the Scandinavia for many years which also supports my motivation to live and study in this country. Unfortunately, I have not had an opportunity to visit Denmark yet. This would be a unique chance to explore this country and experience the real Danish life.
To be honest, my plans were totally different. Few months ago, I was thinking of studying in Germany. But then I accidentally heard about study in Denmark and I spontaneously decided to change my plans because I was very impressed by the method of teaching and I realized it is an ideal school for me. Denmark offers me not only high quality of education but also a perfect opportunity to meet people all around the world. After all I love challenges and I would like to do something different from what I am used to.
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Here are my suggestions: Dear Sir/Madam, My name is ... and I am currently studying at an 8-year gymnasium in Prague. I would like to apply for UCN's AP Degree in Service, Hospitality & Tourism Management.
- Here are my suggestions: Dear Sir/Madam, My name is ...
- and I am currently studying at an 8-year gymnasium in Prague.
- I would like to apply for UCN's AP Degree in Service, Hospitality & Tourism Management.
- I have decided to apply for this programme, because tourism is actually the field where I would be happiest to work.
- Traveling has always been a passion for me.
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Here are my suggestions:
Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is ... and I am currently studying at an 8-year gymnasium in Prague. I would like to apply for UCN's AP Degree in Service, Hospitality & Tourism Management.
I have decided to apply for this programme, because tourism is actually the field where I would be happiest to work. Traveling has always b
Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is ... and I am currently studying at an 8-year gymnasium in Prague. I would like to apply for UCN's AP Degree in Service, Hospitality & Tourism Management.
I have decided to apply for this programme, because tourism is actually the field where I would be happiest to work. Traveling has always b
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Hi guys, I'm trying to give you a slight comment to your motivation letter.
I think you should delete the sentence "Unfortunately, I have not had an opportunity to visit Denmark yet. This would be a unique chance to explore this country and experience the real Danish life." because the sentence is unnecessary information for the company. You just have to input a "good side" of you
I think you should delete the sentence "Unfortunately, I have not had an opportunity to visit Denmark yet. This would be a unique chance to explore this country and experience the real Danish life." because the sentence is unnecessary information for the company. You just have to input a "good side" of you
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