Hi,
I read a few motivation letters wherein there were many valuable feedbacks provided to the students. I am here for some guidance as well. Therefore, please have a look at my motivational letter and let me know your feedback.
Thanks in advance.
Deeksha
I am applying for MSc in Banking and finance as doing a major in finance is my ambition and I want to be a finance risk professional. I have basic knowledge of finance basis my previous academics and need to enhance to a professional level. I started studying finance during my high school which helped in understanding the finance and accounting in my bachelor's and Masters. I was always passionate to study finance since my school days. I was exposed to the professional world of finance while I was working for my clients Wells Fargo and Morgan Stanley. I used to prepare training materials for them that is when I had the opportunity to go through some courses which drove my interest towards finance further. After coming to the Netherlands I was able to explore many opportunities and chose to be a professional risk manager.
Utrecht University is very well known in the Netherlands for its curriculum and opportunities offered during the course of internship programs. Additionally, the practical knowledge through assignments and also the professional skill development course to prepare us for the job market is a perfect opportunity to prepare for professional skills.
I have 5 years of work experience working on a number of projects and involving some financial expertise like creating purchase orders and weekly financial reports. Additionally, my final thesis was a business plan in masters in management from Maastricht wherein I had created a financial plan for the company which involved analysing every cost and preparing a plan which would show the time is taken for profit making, payback period, Pro-forma statement and return on investment. I had also come across many friends who were able to gain professional certifications while on the job or during their masters at Maastricht School of Management. Some of them were previously experienced in the field of finance and advice to do a professional certification for market recognition. I explored and found that my area of interest was in learning about risk management and how Msc in banking and finance would be a perfect combination to complete my PRM certification.
I have completed the courses of Microeconomics, Macroeconomics and Corporate finance in my Bachelors as well as my Masters. The courses covered all the topics as required by the university. Additionally, the course for Mathematics was undertaken by me in my Bachelors and Econometrics was covered in my masters in management from Maastricht School of Management. I have also enrolled myself in the PRM certification (https://www.prmia.org/). It is a program with a duration of 3 years for completion. The courses covered in Msc will be helpful for me in PRM as the course content is similar to the courses in the program.
As for the academic achievements I have completed my bachelors in commerce, my second diploma was MBA with dual specialization in International Business and Finance and I have recently completed my second masters in management from Maastricht School of Management. My ambition is now to explore the world of finance which can be done through an in-depth knowledge into the same field. The masters will be very helpful to achieve my ambition.
The road to my education was always challenging due to lack of finance but my unrelenting will and positive outlook helped me attain my Bachelors in Commerce from Delhi University combined with many part-time jobs as it was a distance learning program and so was my first masters was also a part-time program. I have always looked at challenges in the most pessimistic way wherein I was able to convert my challenges into opportunities. My biggest achievement when I was highly motivated was when I was given the opportunity by my client to visit them for three months in London. I came across many people from diverse culture and backgrounds that were able to achieve to become a banker through hard work and dedication.
The path to success is always about making right choices and making the most of the opportunities available. What I do today can improve my tomorrow a quote by Ralph Marston has been an inspiration to me. Based on my credentials, I request Utrecht University to review my application for admission.
From what you have written here, the purpose of this letter is not clear to me. Is this an application letter, by which you are initiating the application process? Or is it a motivation letter, which explains why you want to do this course of study?
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From what you have written here, the purpose of this letter is not clear to me.
Is this an application letter, by which you are initiating the application process?
Or is it a motivation letter, which explains why you want to do this course of study?
Will the university already have received your CV? You seem to be repeating a lot of details from your CV.
A motivation letter should focus on your motives for wanting to do this course of study. I would expect a lot of "I want to do this because . . . because . . . because . . . You don't have to use those exact words, but that's the idea.
When I finish reading your letter, I should have a clear idea of what your main motives are. I don't grasp that from reading what you ha
I see. Do you feel that the reader will be able to relate each of your paragraphs to one of the bullet points when he reads the paragraph's topic sentence?
Have you addressed each of the bullet points? For example, I don't see much about what subject areas you find most interesting, and why.