Motivation letter for university admission

Hi, I want to apply for a few universities in two different countries and I have to write a motivation letter for each. Could you please check these two?

Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to apply for the Master’s Degree Programme in Marketing in ….. University starting from September 2013. My aim is to work in an international field related to Marketing. Therefore, I would like to gain more knowledge and experience in dealing with people, researching customer’s tastes and using this new knowledge for creating well addressed and proper commercials and mass products. I believe that …. University is the best choice to achieve my goals and career objectives.
I hold a four year bachelor’s degree in Business Administration, which was focused on many subjects, including my preferred Marketing. I was interested in that field long before, and this course just strengthened my desire to study it and choose it as a future career. I find it the most creative sphere in the economics, and due to the fact that I think of myself as a very creative person, I strongly believe that it is the right one for me.
My goal is to someday have a successful career in Marketing. I would like to contribute to the research in the customer’s tastes and opinions. I have always been interested in psychology, which could be of great use when choosing what and how to present to the public. Also, I have completed a course in IT technologies, which could be useful in the process of making commercials.
In my bachelor degree course, I improved my interpersonal skills, which enabled me to work well not only as an individual, but in groups, as well. Therefore, I believe I could adapt well in the academic atmosphere in your university, be a valuable asset and make my contribution to your department. I hope with my hard work and future success to be able to populate the good name of your respected university and its students.
Studying abroad has been my dream for many years. I have heard many positive reactions from people I know and who have been in Denmark. I witnessed their fascination with the academic and practical studies. Danish universities are well known all around the world for their excellence and quality of teaching as they provide a relaxing environment for students who wish to accomplish both study and research due to the intense efforts made by the universities themselves. The unique method of teaching attracts students like me to achieve their goals. This is enough to convince me and make my decision to continue my education in a Danish university.
I want to study at ….. University because of your reputation as a welcoming and supportive institution for foreign students. I strongly believe that you offer a high quality education, with a focus on the communication between the professors and students, as well as an excellent approach to the disciplines and a lot of practical knowledge. Additionally, the courses offered in the Master’s Programme in Marketing would offer me the needed theoretical background to pursue my research interests. All these positives makes me even more confident of my decision.
I will do everything to meet your expectations, may it be academic excellence, motivation and ambition for research or interpersonal skills. Furthermore, I believe that my international background will add more diversity to your programme.

Thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to your acceptance.

Yours sincerely,
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Dear Sir or Madam,

I wish to apply for the Master's Degree of your university in the subject of Marketing for the academic year 2013-2014. This course is a resolute step towards my ambition to work in an international field related to Marketing.
For many years I have wanted to study abroad. I have received a great amount of positive feedback regarding Britain. I think it is a wonderful country with a rich history. English universities are well known all around the world by their excellence and quality of teaching, which is the main reason why England attracts so many foreign students, such as myself. The percentage of people who develop a successful career after graduating an English university keeps rising. Moreover, during the course you are surrounded by experts in their field, which ensures you receive the best quality education.
I recently obtained my bachelor degree in Business Administration. The four years of undergraduate education have been an enriching experience both academically and otherwise, and I am determined to maintain the high levels of excellence throughout my career. Marketing was one of the subjects I had the pleasure of studying during that time. This just strengthened my desire to choose it as a future career. I think of it as the most imaginative sphere of the economics, and because I believe I am a very creative person I think it is the right choice for me. I would also like to gain more knowledge and experience in communicating with individuals from different countries all around the world, research customer’s tastes and use that new knowledge for creating well addressed and proper commercials and mass products.
Having a successful career in a Marketing related field is my future goal. I would like to use the wisdom through my graduate studies and contribute to the research in the customer’s preferences and opinions. I have always been interested in psychology and I think this could turn out to be useful at times when I have to make the right decisions regarding the creations of commercials and how they are presented to the public. I have also completed an IT course, which I think would be helpful when creating advertisements.
During my undergraduate study, I had the chance to improve my interpersonal skills through all the projects I had to participate in. That enabled me to work equally well as an individual, and as a team player. Therefore, I believe I could adapt well in the academic atmosphere in your university, be a valuable asset and make my contribution to your department. I hope to be able to prove the good name of your respected university and its students with my hard work and future success.
I choose to study at the University of …… for a number of reasons. First of all, it is the excellent reputation of your university as a welcoming and supporting institution for foreign students. What is more, I believe you offer a high quality education focused on developing the needed theoretical and practical knowledge. Additionally, the courses offered in the Master’s Programme in Marketing would provide me with the necessary background to pursue my research interests. I am eager to accept new challenges, and I believe that your university is the right place for me.
I will do everything to meet your expectations, may it be academic excellence, motivation for research or interpersonal skills. Furthermore, I believe that my international background will add more diversity to your programme.

Thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to your acceptance.

Yours sincerely,
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Thank you very much