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Elena Petuhova Posted 10 years ago
Letter Writing
Motivation letter for University
Dear forum's inhabitants! Could you please take a look on my motivation letter for a University? I would really appreciate any advice or/and corrections. Thanks!
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to you to apply for the Master’s program in Computer Science at the University of Bonn.
My name is Elena P___ I am 33 years old. I have been having passion for the computer science since I was 15 years old and my father bought our first home computer and I with great pleasure started to study it. Informatics was my favorite discipline at school so I had been attending optional classes on Informatics. After I have graduated from school, I started “Computer Science and Computer Engineering” Bachelor program at Baltic State Technical University “Voenmeh” n.a. Ustinova in Saint-Petersburg, Russia which I have finished with honors in 2005. These time I was interested in systems of automatic control as well so I have decided to broaden my knowledge by started masters program “Automation and control” at the same university which I have finished with honors in 2007. Simultaneously with studying for masters I had been working part time at «Granit-7» where I was doing researches in the field of methods of signal’s processing. After obtaining masters degree I had been working as a software developer at “Ravenstvo” for a year. On that position I have developed the software for testing gamma therapeutic device’s control system and the software for visualization the motion of gamma therapeutic device on the computer of its operator. Now I have been working at “Concern “Granit-Electron” for 8 years. My main achievements at the company are the following. I developed the software for computer simulation of flight of a pilotless aircraft and the software for frequency-response characteristic of the control system of pilotless aircraft computation and plotting.
At the present I aim to get a position as a software developer in an international company. And I think that international master program will give me good chances to do that because this is great opportunity to deepen my knowledge in the field of Computer Science, obtain experience of working in international team, improve my language skills. Moreover I believe German Education generally has better quality than Russian and better organized and practically oriented. Moreover the University of Bonn is in top 100 in the World University Ranking 2015-2016.
Thank you very much for considering my application. I look forward to your positive response.
Yours sincerely,
Elena P____.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to you to apply for the Master’s program in Computer Science at the University of Bonn.
My name is Elena P___ I am 33 years old. I have been having passion for the computer science since I was 15 years old and my father bought our first home computer and I with great pleasure started to study it. Informatics was my favorite discipline at school so I had been attending optional classes on Informatics. After I have graduated from school, I started “Computer Science and Computer Engineering” Bachelor program at Baltic State Technical University “Voenmeh” n.a. Ustinova in Saint-Petersburg, Russia which I have finished with honors in 2005. These time I was interested in systems of automatic control as well so I have decided to broaden my knowledge by started masters program “Automation and control” at the same university which I have finished with honors in 2007. Simultaneously with studying for masters I had been working part time at «Granit-7» where I was doing researches in the field of methods of signal’s processing. After obtaining masters degree I had been working as a software developer at “Ravenstvo” for a year. On that position I have developed the software for testing gamma therapeutic device’s control system and the software for visualization the motion of gamma therapeutic device on the computer of its operator. Now I have been working at “Concern “Granit-Electron” for 8 years. My main achievements at the company are the following. I developed the software for computer simulation of flight of a pilotless aircraft and the software for frequency-response characteristic of the control system of pilotless aircraft computation and plotting.
At the present I aim to get a position as a software developer in an international company. And I think that international master program will give me good chances to do that because this is great opportunity to deepen my knowledge in the field of Computer Science, obtain experience of working in international team, improve my language skills. Moreover I believe German Education generally has better quality than Russian and better organized and practically oriented. Moreover the University of Bonn is in top 100 in the World University Ranking 2015-2016.
Thank you very much for considering my application. I look forward to your positive response.
Yours sincerely,
Elena P____.
Top answer
Your letter is nicely written. I made some corrections for you. My name is Elena P___ I am 33 years old.
- Your letter is nicely written.
- I made some corrections for you.
- My name is Elena P___ I am 33 years old.
- I have been passionate about computer science since I was 15 years old, when my father bought our first home computer, and I started to study computer science with great pleasure.
- Informatics was my favorite discipline at school, so I attending elective classes in informatics.
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Your letter is nicely written. I made some corrections for you.
My name is Elena P___ I am 33 years old. I have been passionate about computer science since I was 15 years old, when my father bought our first home computer, and I started to study computer science with great pleasure. Informatics was my favorite discipline at school, so I attending elective classes in informatics. After I
My name is Elena P___ I am 33 years old. I have been passionate about computer science since I was 15 years old, when my father bought our first home computer, and I started to study computer science with great pleasure. Informatics was my favorite discipline at school, so I attending elective classes in informatics. After I
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