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Ibbi Posted 18 years ago
Letter Writing

motivation letter for scholarship (please guide me)

With most deference, I am writing this letter with reference to your admission provisions. I have done my bachelors in the field of XXX from a well reputed university, which has been ranked amongst the top universities in XXX (country name) for many years. Due to the changing circumstances and the trend of higher learning, I am presenting my case to be considered for your varsity.

Considering the trend of globalization and the cognizance of the technological progress, it is an engrossing factor to reach for the opportunities provided through out the world. By and large, the scope of using XXX (the MS course for which I am applying) and other facilitations similar to this technology has emboldened many third world countries individuals to take part in furnishing their knowledge in letter and spirit. Also envisaging the current developments and ensuing progress in the field of technology compared with other developed countries have cemented my mind in imbibing higher learning in the vicinity of European countries. At any rate this also synchronizes the positive diplomacy, side by side in understanding each other norms, customs, traditions and linguistics in a more conducive environment. Also the rapid strides that European countries are making in enhancing the skills of technological progress through knowledge to third world countries have drastically impacted the society positively.

I also have an ardent passion of learning the innovative ideas in the circle of technology. Keeping this view in mind, I progressed through my studies curriculum by learning subjects which were of practical implementation. It will be an added opportunity for higher learning for me because of two reasons which I want to expound. First of all it will help my abilities and credentials to foster in a coherent way, helping me to materialize that knowledge to some areas of need in future. Also, the holistic approach presented by the varsity will provide me with additional strength and vigor to go for research works, which has become pertinent in the comity of the nation for its progress and culmination.

These factors mentioned above have highlighted my case that if given the opportunity of studying in your premises, I will prove myself worthy in all respects. To conclude my letter, it will be not out of question to state that availing golden opportunity is the wisdom to every success in future. Bearing this in mind this is an opportunity for me to be considered for your admission criteria. I will be highly obliged, if my academic record and interest proves to be a recommendation case for me.
  

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Most of your letter is empty words, and the reader will not have the patience to finish reading it. I have stricken out unnecessary or inappropriate words; you may have to rewrite the sentences to accommodate the omissions. Corrections are in bold: With most deference, I am writing this letter in application for admission provisions .

  • Most of your letter is empty words, and the reader will not have the patience to finish reading it.
  • I have stricken out unnecessary or inappropriate words; you may have to rewrite the sentences to accommodate the omissions.
  • Corrections are in bold: With most deference, I am writing this letter in application for admission provisions .
  • I received my bachelor's in the field of *** from [ Name ] University , which is ranked amongst the top universities in *** (country name) for many years .
  • Due to the changing circumstances and the trend of higher learning, I am presenting my case to be considered for your varsity.
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Most of your letter is empty words, and the reader will not have the patience to finish reading it. I have stricken out unnecessary or inappropriate words; you may have to rewrite the sentences to accommodate the omissions. Corrections are in bold:

With most deference, I am writing this letter in application for admission provisions. I

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