Motivation letter for Masters Program

Question

I am looking for anyone who may help with my motivation letter for the MA master program in Civil and Environmental Engineering. If someone have enough time just correct me grammatical errors, suggest me what should or should not put into, with some constructive comments. I will greatly appreciate it. Thanks in advance

Dear Selection Committee,

I am writing to apply for the Master program in Civil and Environmental Engineering at the University of Warsaw starting in the autumn of 2014.

Currently I’m doing Masters Degree of Natural Resources Management (MBA, 1st term) at Ilia State University. I have completed my BA in Business Administration at Tbilisi State University. During my undergraduate studies I have built up a comprehensive understanding of concepts such as business analysis, strategy planning, investments, team management etc. Besides, it became clear to me that world's fast-growing economy is a big threat to our nature and that industrial processes cause enormous environmental damages.

Compromise between economic growth and environmental protection is the biggest challenge for most of the countries, especially in developing ones, like in Georgia, yet nothing much has been achieved in favor of environment so far. For example, in my country, there is not adopted “Polluter Pays” Principle, funds raised for big projects are mostly implemented with non-environmentally friendly methods. Also, there are not enough qualified professionals who can control and monitor the quality of the nature. Generally, environmental regulatory instruments need to improve. So, I believe that our society needs this specialty and I am enthusiastic to devote myself into this field.

The main reason why I changed my field of study was not caused by its high necessity in my country, but because my strong interest in this area. I have always been keenly interested to protect our nature and wanted to study on that field during my undergraduate studies too, but that time in my town there was just only one university which offered related course and that was Ecology.

I have always been taking my role seriously and have been passionate about my results. I was a successful student in my BA course, gained degree with a grade of GPA - 3.16. I am proud to say that I have not paid one Lari for my education, gained high scores for both Bachelors and Masters entrance examinations helped me to obtain full financial assistance from the government of Georgia.

With my major I successfully completed courses in Tourism Management, which is highly depended on the quality of environment. As for my extracurricular activities I participated several conferences, one of them was about “The Problem of Ozone Layer”. At the same time I volunteered summer job in “greening the square”. Currently I joined Association “Green Alternative”.

In addition this I have completed two internship programs. First one was six months long internship at the GBDC Caucasia (NGO which offers consulting services to small businesses in Georgia). Second time I was an intern in USAID’s and EPI’s project implemented in Georgia by

Deloitte Consulting LLP. As an intern under manufacturing and services component, I conducted business planning activities for one of the EPI beneficiary companies. At the same time I have been working at Boombully Rooms & Hostel as a receptionist with one-year work experience. During that time in the hostel I have bettered my communication skills, and increased my self-confidence. The experience I've acquired during my work there will definitely help me to adapt to any new environment.

I am applying to this program because I believe it is an ideal match to my future career aspirations and goals in environmental protection field. I am strongly motivated to attend classes and study at the University of Warsaw, which I consider the best choice for me as I think I would greatly benefit from the course it offers.

To sum up, I am sure that my skills and background, combined with deep concern in environmental management and willingness to make a progress make me very good candidate and will match the high standards set by your university.

Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to positive response.

Sincerely yours,

Irakli

Ika Gotsiridze · Accepted Answer

I am looking for anyone who may help with my motivation letter for the MA master program in Civil and Environmental Engineering. If someone have enough time just correct me grammatical errors, suggest me what should or should not put into, with some constructive comments. I will greatly appreciate it. Thanks in advance Emotion: smile

Dear Selection Committee,

I am writing to apply for the Master program in Civil and Environmental Engineering at the University of Warsaw starting in the autumn of 2014.

Currently I’m doing Masters Degree of Natural Resources Management (MBA, 1st term) at Ilia State University. I have completed my BA in Business Administration at Tbilisi State University. During my undergraduate studies I have built up a comprehensive understanding of concepts such as business analysis, strategy planning, investments, team management etc. Besides, it became clear to me that world's fast-growing economy is a big threat to our nature and that industrial processes cause enormous environmental damages.

Compromise between economic growth and environmental protection is the biggest challenge for most of the countries, especially in developing ones, like in Georgia, yet nothing much has been achieved in favor of environment so far. For example, in my country, there is not adopted “Polluter Pays” Principle, funds raised for big projects are mostly implemented with non-environmentally friendly methods. Also, there are not enough qualified professionals who can control and monitor the quality of the nature. Generally, environmental regulatory instruments need to improve. So, I believe that our society needs this specialty and I am enthusiastic to devote myself into this field.

The main reason why I changed my field of study was not caused by its high necessity in my country, but because my strong interest in this area. I have always been keenly interested to protect our nature and wanted to study on that field during my undergraduate studies too, but that time in my town there was just only one university which offered related course and that was Ecology.

I have always been taking my role seriously and have been passionate about my results. I was a successful student in my BA course, gained degree with a grade of GPA - 3.16. I am proud to say that I have not paid one Lari for my education, gained high scores for both Bachelors and Masters entrance examinations helped me to obtain full financial assistance from the government of Georgia.

With my major I successfully completed courses in Tourism Management, which is highly depended on the quality of environment. As for my extracurricular activities I participated several conferences, one of them was about “The Problem of Ozone Layer”. At the same time I volunteered summer job in “greening the square”. Currently I joined Association “Green Alternative”.

In addition this I have completed two internship programs. First one was six months long internship at the GBDC Caucasia (NGO which offers consulting services to small businesses in Georgia). Second time I was an intern in USAID’s and EPI’s project implemented in Georgia by

Deloitte Consulting LLP. As an intern under manufacturing and services component, I conducted business planning activities for one of the EPI beneficiary companies. At the same time I have been working at Boombully Rooms & Hostel as a receptionist with one-year work experience. During that time in the hostel I have bettered my communication skills, and increased my self-confidence. The experience I've acquired during my work there will definitely help me to adapt to any new environment.

I am applying to this program because I believe it is an ideal match to my future career aspirations and goals in environmental protection field. I am strongly motivated to attend classes and study at the University of Warsaw, which I consider the best choice for me as I think I would greatly benefit from the course it offers.

To sum up, I am sure that my skills and background, combined with deep concern in environmental management and willingness to make a progress make me very good candidate and will match the high standards set by your university.

Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to positive response.

Sincerely yours,

Irakli

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Hello Irakli;

The motivation letter is not meant to repeat information that will be in your school transcripts and other material.
Instead, it is your opportunity to talk about yourself and your goals. The readers will be looking at how you express yourself and your language skills. It is the opportunity for you to show you organizational and logical and critical thinking skills.
You can demonstrate your background and skills by giving specific examples that are not obvious elsewhere in your submission materials.
For example: "I am an intelligent, motivated student." Anyone on earth can say this. It says nothing about you, only your opinion of yourself.
Contrast with "I loved Dr. Jones' advanced calculus class. Math came so naturally to me that I volunteered to stay after class to help my fellow students understand it. As a result, everyone in my class passed the course. My professor said that I was responsible for the success of the class. You can read his testimonial in his letter of recommendation."

--------------

Your first paragraph is very weak. Here are some comments:

Currently I’m doing Masters Degree of Natural Resources Management (MBA, 1st term) at Ilia State University. I have completed my BA in Business Administration at Tbilisi State University. (This information will be in your transcripts, don't repeat it) During my undergraduate studies I have built up a comprehensive understanding of concepts such as business analysis, strategy planning, investments, team management etc. (This information is very general. Any time you say "etc" , it is very very bad. It shows a lack of critical thinking because you cannot finish a complete list. ) Besides, it became clear to me that world's fast-growing economy is a big threat to our nature and that industrial processes cause enormous environmental damages. (Platitude. Obvious to anyone.)

Your next paragraphs have some good, specific points. You should begin your letter with a challenge to capture the interest of the reader right away. Read your writing by pretending that you are on the admissions committee. You have 150 letters to read and 95% begin same way "I am applying to XYZ program in your school. I am graduating in ABC. I have good grades. I understand a lot of stuff..." BORING!!! But now you read a letter that opens with an attention-grabbing statement. The personal details are at the end, in the summary paragraph. The writer has captured and held your attention all the way to that point.

Compromise between economic growth and environmental protection is a ~~the biggest~~ challenge for all ~~most of the~~ countries, ~~especially in developing ones, like in~~ most especially Georgia, and I want to do something about it in my future career as an environmental scientist. ~~Nothing much has been achieved in favor of environment so far~~, In Georgia the environmental damage is obvious and becoming a serious threat to public health. . There are good intentions and some laws. For example, ~~in my country~~, there is ~~not adopted~~“Polluter Pays” Principle, however, it is seldom, if ever, enforced. (Give a specific example) ~~funds raised for big projects are mostly implemented with non-environmentally friendly methods~~. ~~Also~~, Enforcement is difficult because there are not enough qualified professionals who can inspect, control and monitor these projects. ~~the quality of the nature~~. Generally, environmental regulatory instruments need to improve. So, I believe that our society needs this specialty and I am enthusiastic to devote myself into this field.

Ika Gotsiridze · Answer

Hello,

Sorry for late answer. Thank you for helping me to make my letter of motivation better

I am so grateful that you gave me valuable directions and corrected grammatical errors as well, It is so important to me. I will consider all of your advice

As it seems my first paragraph needs to be changed completely.
Can you suggest me how should I start the letter? What about if I start letter with sentences like: "Sustainable development is impossible without environmental sustainability", or something like that?

Thanks in advance

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Ika GotsiridzeWhat about if I start letter with sentences like: "Sustainable development is impossible without environmental sustainability", or something like that?

Stating a problem that you want to attack or solve in your future career or by your research is a great way to start a "motivation letter." Begin with the problem that motivates or intrigues you, and then describe the whys and hows.

Anonymous · Answer

what is the difference between ( must have been studied ) and ( must have been studying ) ? which one is correct ?

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Anonymous what is the difference between ( must have been studied ) and ( must have been studying ) ? which one is correct ?

If you have a question that is not related to the discussion, please start a new topic. Both of your verb phrases are grammatically correct.

Motivation letter for Masters Program

Top answer

Get the Weekly English Kit 📬

Related Questions