Motivation Letter for graduate program-Opinions please!!!!!

0This forum helped me a lot in the redaction of my motivation letter and I would like to have some opinions about it.02br
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00SIMON F.02br
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00Montreal, Qc., Canada02br
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00Dear Sir or Madam,02br
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00I am writing to apply for the Master’s program duel degree MBA / MS in Sport Management at the University of Massachusetts, Amherst, as an international student from Canada, for the entry of September 2007.02br
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00I graduated in Business Administration, major in finance, in May 2006 from the HEC Montreal, in Quebec, Canada. My degree focuses on business administration and market finance. I studied one semester at the Helsinki School of Economics, in Finland, where I got experience in studying and living in a different country. I've became fluent English speaking thru my studies in Finland and I am now bilingual, French being my mother tongue.02br
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00The University of Massachusetts has a highly recognize MBA and MS in Sport Management, which is one of the main reasons why I would like to be part of the duel degree. My two biggest career and life interests, business administration and sports, are reunited in the duel degree where I consider the curriculum to be exactly what I need to achieve my career goals in the sport industry. The reputation and the alumni network of the University of Massachusetts are also weighting a lot in my decision as the sports industry in North America and around the world is growing at a fast rate and where more specialized administrators are needed.02br
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00Sport has always been part of my life, playing many of them, but especially hockey where I found my real passion. As a player in a competitive level, I’ve learned many important things that have made me the person I am today. Discipline and work are two important values that sport inculcated me. These values are also guidance in my career where team work, especially, is the basis of good relations, progress and success in the business world.02br
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00During the last year and a half, I’ve been working at XXXXX, an investment company, where I’ve developed many international investment projects as an executive assistant. I have learned through my work experience how to construct and analyze business plans and I gained important knowledge in analyzing bank documents and investment contracts. The international side of my work helped me gained good contacts and experience with different business cultures. I also worked as an accounting clerk putting in place immobilization software, creating accounting reports and making adjusting entries in the books. My undergraduate studies in business administration helped me a lot to develop my experience at work.02br
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00I am highly motivated to pursue my studies in the graduate duel degree MBA / MS in Sport Management. I am really excited to get the chance to come to the United States of America to study and to work in the sport industry, which is my passion. I am passionate, determined and enthusiastic in everything I do and I will do everything necessary to get in the MBA / MS in Sport Management program and succeed.02br
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00With a solid foundation in academic and work experience in the sport management through the duel degree MBA / MS in Sport Management at the University of Massachusetts, I am confident that I will have the skills, knowledge, experience and contacts that will enable me to pursue a successful career as a financial advisor in the sport industry, preferably in the NHL. Ultimately, I would like to promote the sport industry in North America, especially in Canada, by being an active member in the sport society.02br
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00Thank you very much for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response.02br
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00Sincerely yours,02br
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00Simon0-