Motivation letter for Fonty's University (Holland)

Hi,

I am writing a motivation letter to apply for admission to Fonty's university, Netherlands. I'm nowhere near finished writing the letter but that's okay, I have until May next year!

I would just like some pointers on what I have written already and bear in mind that it's only a draft version and incomplete in terms of, I've not said everything I want to say. It's the first time I've had to write a motivational letter of any kind so I was really quite lost for content but once I start writing, I go on and on and on.

So, I'll end my little spiel here as to not bore you to death, please take a look at what I've written so far and tell me what you think.

Thanks

"Dear Sir/Madam,
I wish to apply for admission to the BSc Physiotherapy English Stream program at Fontys Hogescholen Eindhoven in which I am extremely interested. I am enormously enthusiastic to have the opportunity to study abroad, which has been a dream of mine ever since I was 13 years old. A degree from Fonty’s University would give me the opportunity to make substantial progress in developing a Physiotherapy career internationally, whilst also contributing to the development of Physiotherapy and the impact the service has from rehabilitating injured Army personnel, to helping improve the quality of life for old and vulnerable people, with a view to becoming specialised in the area of Sports Physiotherapy.

I am an English citizen who has a recent history of moving away from home to actively pursue new opportunities. Originally from Middlesbrough, a relatively large town in the North East of the country I attended St. Michael’s R.C. School in Billingham, widely accredited for its exceptional results and performances before furthering my studies at college. Whilst doing research for a History project I stumbled upon the Erasmus Project, this became the catalyst that developed my ambitious dreams of continuing my studies abroad. My international background will be an invaluable asset, not only to me but also to the Physiotherapy course, the students and the university. I have friends in countries all around the world that I've met in ways such as, whilst on holiday, through my Scouting Association connections and on an online penpal site, which is also one of the modes of communication I use to keep in contact with them. Through my Scouting years I gained the international award and now that I’m the Explorer Scout section Leader I have taken the opportunity to set up various International relations and penpal activities for the Scouts to take part in with the end goal of gaining their International relations badge. The first time a badge of its kind would be awarded since I gained it 5 years ago. I love learning languages and have a real interest in the history and culture of every country I visit which I actively pursue by exploring tourism hotspots such as museums and famous buildings. --- Talk about Holland ---

In February 2006 I inured my knee whilst playing football. This was to be the key event that triggered my interest in Physiotherapy . At a young age I hated Hospitals and Medical clinics, they reminded me of Dentist clinics which I would avoid at all costs. It worried me that I’d be in the hospital 3 times a week for Physiotherapy but right from the first session my mind was put at ease by a fantastic Physiotherapist named Steve Carter. He helped me through the pain I was experiencing; he helped me to revive my motivation when my improvements were slow; he was a real comfort and became a good friend. I continued my treatment for 4 years and became intrigued about the job roles and began to ask him about Physiotherapy in terms of a career, what’s it like? Where did you study? What do you think are the best parts of the job? He really was key in affirming my long-term interest in Physiotherapy, I would go as far as to say, he was a role model for me. Whilst doing a renewed assessment he noticed several things that were not normal and immediately referred me for an x-ray which showed continual meniscus damage and a previously undiagnosed foreign bone at the side of my knee joint. He consulted a senior specialist who advised me that surgery will be needed. I had the surgery, continued rehabilitation and my knee felt so much better as a result.

It was amazing in my eyes, how a Physiotherapist was able to find something Doctors missed and that really helped me to see how a physiotherapist is integrated into the team to make a whole interrelated Medical team and the extended roles and responsibilities involved . I really admired him for his dedication and took inspiration from his work ethic and the fantastic rapport we’d built. I later found out that the team he is in was widely considered to be the best Medical team in the North-East region of England. This fact, along with all that he had done and helped me through, had given me the inspiration and drive to actively pursue a career in Physiotherapy and to aid me in this goal I signed up for a BTEC course in Applied Medical Science which I was so enthusiastic about that I completed the 2 year course in just 1 year."