Motivation letter for entry to university

I need some help if someone could edit or improve upn the motivation letter below. I thank you for your help.

Dear Sir,

I am very interested in joining the xxxxxxxx undergraduate degree course at the University of XXXXX.

I have had an interest in gaming for several years and spent my work-experience while at high school at a game retailer in my local town. I also spent 7 years as a senior member of (town name) Gaming Club where for 5 of those years I acted as club treasurer. During these periods I have learned a great deal about the psychology of games and gaming and what differntiates a successful game from one that is less so. In addition, I socialise predominantly with people who have this same level of interest in gaming as I do and we have often worked together in creating role-plays and in story-telling.

As a result, I am enthusiastic about furthering my interest and deepening my knowledge of such gaming, particularly in the area of game design and production; thus my interest in that particular area of the degree course that the university offers. Haviing studied the contents of the course and its description, I feel it would be a perfect fit for my future plans. While I am already familiar with and possess some knowledge of computer-based games, I would benefit enormously from the programmming side in which I still have much to learn, particularly in the programme coding of such games.

In the future, my ambition initially would be to secure employment within a computer or traditional game design and production company and then, ultimately, to operate as an independent game designer and producer for private clients.

In addition to the academic side, I feel that doing the course in (country name) would be ideal since, while I am a (country name) national, I am also half-(ethnicity type) and would therefore feel relatively at home and comfortable in the country during the 4 years I would be there and would benefit from learning the (country) language while I am there as it is somewhat similar to my second language. Furthermore, (country name) is also close to my native country and I would therefore have the opportunity to return there for short visits.

Thank you for your advice.

Robin