Motivation letter for admission

Hi guys, could you please check if there are any grammatical errors in this letter ?many thanks.

Dear Mr. xxx xxx,
I am xxx and I would like to apply to your Msc in Finance and Banking.
This year I obtained a bechelor’s degree in “Economics of Markets and Financial Intermediaries” in (name of university).
My degree incorporated many statistical, quantitative, business and financial modules that have helped me to form a basic formation which will aid me in successfully completing this course.
My request of applying responds to my desire of working abroad and it is well know that MSc in F&B is a prestigious and internationally recognised course.
Meanwhile, having a program taught completely in English and frequented by foreign people, will improve my English and broaden my cognitive horizon. I am also preparing for the IELTS test and taking English lessons.
My career goal is to work in the field of finance such as quantitative analyst, trader, asset manager or risk consultant and this course is the one best solution to attain my own target.
I am very sure that I will give my best; hard study and commitment have always been present in my academic career. I am highly motivated to overcome every challenge and deepen my knowledge. I will meet your expectations.

Thank you for your attention,
Kind Regards,
xxx xxx