Motivation Letter for a university in UK

May someone correct my structure? Do I have many mistakes?

I can’t wait to read your answer. Thank you very much in advance!!!

Josefine



Dear Sir or Madame



In June I will graduate with a bachelor’s degree in sociology with focus on business. I am highly motivated to continue my study at the . It is the master of human resource management I chose because it combines business and social science which are fields I am already familiar with. By following this program I can enhance my basic knowledge to become specialised. The benefit I expect is to realize my intention to work in the human resource management.



To understand the organisational behaviour I did a dual apprenticeship at XY GmbH for two years. This multinational enterprise offered me the opportunity to gain insight the operational sequences of an industrial firm. I supported the everyday business in many departments, such as human resource management relations, sales, marketing, accounting, logistics, customer services and the purchasing department. It required the ability to work productively and co-operatively in different kinds of group, to work under pressure, to manage time well and of course IT skills. It was the department of human resource management that I was most interested in. There I helped to prearrange and accomplish the recruiting procedure.

At the same time I received the theoretical background at the BLA Chamber of Commerce. My subjects were industrial business management, accounting, organisation, automatic data processing and economics and civics. After two years I took four exams which I passed with a good mark and in that moment I decided to work in the profession of human resource management.

Also another apprenticeship at XXZ GmbH in reconfirmed my intention.



Since I enjoyed working in the human resource management I decided to develop my knowledge in social science by studying sociology with focus on business. At the University XYZ I took courses regarding the organisational behaviour and structure of institutions, communication and industry. By doing research I became familiar with information retrieval and I learned to solve problems independently. It also enabled me to think analytically and critically. Due to my double degree program I participated in I spent one year in X/Italy at the università degli studi di XY. During this year I learned Italian and I also received the Italian “Laurea Triennale” which is the equivalent of the German bachelor degree.



By spending nine months in / at the XZ International Language I had the chance

to improved my English which I already studied for nine years. To verify my knowledge I will take the TOEFL in April 2006 and hand the results in to you.

The experiences I made in the USA, Italy and made me flexible and open-minded. In addition I acquired a multicultural understanding and the ability to interact with different natures.



The combination of practical and theoretical background I gained as well as the personal skills and key competences I bring with make me a suitable applicant for the program of human resource management. I am very enthusiastic to continue my studies in Great Britain because the education system is famous for its high quality and especially the XXX University has a very good reputation for………………………..





Sincerely,

Josefine