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Susanne Posted 20 years ago
Letter Writing

motivation letter for a job...please help

Need help with my motivation letter!! Could you check it for grammatic errors and style if possible? 
Any suggestions will be appreciated! Thanx!! Susanne

Dear Sir or Madam, 

I am aiming at an international career in a multinational company, and I would be grateful for 
the opportunity to partecipate in the Top Flight Entry programme offered at XXX. My areas of 
interest are Customer service and Marketing and Sales.

I graduated in International Relations and Diplomacy in July 2004 from the University of XXX. 
My four-year degree involved several courses in international economics and law issues. 
During my studies in the XXX I got increasingly interested in economics and business and 
took several courses in international management and trade. I am currently pursuing a Masters 
degree in International Relations at XXX University, Spain. My research topic is „A comparative 
analysis of models of economic development in the EU”.

I got the opportunity to have a greater insight in international sales while working as assistant 
of the import/export department at XXX. I learnt to communicate effectively with clients and 
developed my ability to work independently. In addition, I have experience in customer service 
while working for XXX. 

Top Flight Programme is the best choice for me, because of my deep interest in the European 
high tech industry. I believe that  maintaining Europe’s competitive position requires 
continuous innovation and XXX is the best example of it. I am also very curious to work in 
an international environment since I am ambitious to learn more everyday.

I hope my qualifications would enable me to work for you since I am confident that I could 
make an exciting contribution to your company.

 Yours sincerely,
  

Top answer

Hola ! Let me give it a shot... See in purple below.

— Waïti

  • Hola !
  • Let me give it a shot...
  • See in purple below.
  • Susanne Dear Sir or Madam, I am aiming at an international career in a multinational company, and I would be grateful for the opportunity to participate in the Top Flight Entry programme offered at ***.
  • My areas of interest are Customer service as well as Marketing and Sales.
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Hola !
Let me give it a shot... See in purple below.
Susanne

Dear Sir or Madam, 

I am aiming at an international career in a multinational company, and I would be grateful for 
the opportunity to participate in the Top Flight Entry programme offered at ***. My areas of 
interest are Customer service as well as Marke
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Muchas gracias Waiti, it really sounds better now! I like the last sentence as well!
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De nada, querida Susanne... and buena suerte with your application...
Waïti.
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I would suggest to use word Excited rather than thrilled. Its more fomral. Also, mention that you are attaching a resume, if you are sending a resume.

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