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MAIA MASTER
20 Jan, 2017
Dear Sir or Madam,
I would like to apply to “ERASMUS MUNDUS JOINT MASTER DEGREE” with specialization in “medical imaging and application” starting in September 2017. My career ambition is to become a doctor researching computer aided diagnosis (CAD) systems.
In high school I graduated with electronics and computer science as my majors. I am continuing my academic career with the study of “logic gates, control ladder diagram, electronics circuit design” at technical institute, where academic studies provided me with more knowledge of logic gates, and I conducted lab research on semiconductors. After gaining methodological research experience my academic activity increased over the two years at the institute.
Complementing my academic performance at industrial college department of electronics technology for more practical studies. I study Digital signal processing and Computer aided testing, this study provided me with a real opportunity to my first lab experience in several of the projects during my studies, I was responsible for building a prototype of my graduation project. The main objective of the project is Automation mixing fluid and filling bottle using a programmable logic controller (PLC) instead of the classic control for Higher productivity, Superior quality of end product, improved safety in working condition.
The project consists of three tanks, three solenoid valves for flow control connected to liquid tanks, mixer for mixing the fluids, one limit switch to count bottle passing point, one pump and circle conveyor assembly. This project works when the fluid reach the high level in the mixer tank and it stops after filled each bottle with mixed fluid. My prototype has to fit each tank properly and the other project components, so i design a metal frame in vertical shape for water flow purposes in addition to gain more space, after testing the project I face another challenge with conveyor which is not set each bottle properly under the pump to fill, my background of ladder diagram helped me to control an vehicle wiper motor with a limit switch connected to the conveyor to set each bottle under the pump to fill with the fluid. My experiences with control capability sparked my curiosity for robotics, my experiences also helped me see that the essence of engineering lies in serving social needs. By donating my time as a volunteer computer teacher at an governmental high school I learned to understand how enthusiasm can motivate others. I convinced prospective students to learn Java programming language. Throughout my service I helped many students understand the benefits of programming and computational thinking to solve problems.
I very much hope to obtain the offered scholarship for the cultural exchange by 'Erasmus Mundus' as a civilized window providing me with the right climate, environment, and specialized study towards more work and efforts to complete my postgraduate studies. Moreover, by combining my theoretical and specialized education in the second year of the program, I will gain critical work experience helping me understand the cultural, and ethical issues that drive scientific developments toward the solution of different problems. Meanwhile lectures in “Computer Aided Diagnosis” unlock ways to improve my country outdated medical sources, opening new opportunities for other industries to grow with the new technology.
I have an increasing desire to join ViCOROB research group at the University of Girona to combines top level research with technology transfer, focusing on basic and applied research projects, promoting values such as respect, diversity, hard work, internationalization and entrepreneurship.
Given my past history of commitment to excellence, I am confident that I will bring a high level of energy and enthusiasm to your program, I will enrich the program by enabling fellow students and professors to benefit from my ambitions and open nature. Furthermore, my interdisciplinary education will add more diversity to your program.
Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to your acceptance.
Sincerely yours,
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Your text contains sentence fragments (incomplete sentences) and comma splices (run-on sentences.) Carefully examine each sentence for these problems.
There are subject-verb agreement issues and some confusion between present and past tense.
You also have used inappropriate capitalization. Common nouns and adjectives should not be capitalized.