I am applying to a PhD degree in the area of embedded electronics, and I would like that someone review my motivation letter. This is the final draft reviewed by myself and professors in my university.
Any comment or critics are accepted, as I am willing to improve this document the best posible.
Dear Dr. / Dear Dr.
I write this letter to apply for the doctoral program A at the University X.
The main objective that motivates me to study for a Ph.D. degree is to be able to import and provide knowledge and research in my field of study to my country Panama, and carry out projects that benefit society, having as goal to learn to conceive ideas and to be able to structure them to provide a solution to problems. The second objective is to obtain the degree of doctor, because it represents a challenge for me, which makes me put more care and spend all my concentration and time to achieve the goal and graduate.
Since childhood I was interested to know how things, especially electronic devices, work and I always had a computer to use and see what I could do with it. What began as an interest later became a passion; that passion for study and be filled with knowledge, read and connect ideas with others to form new ideas, creations, inventions and methods, helped me a lot in my undergraduate career "degree in Systems Engineering and Computer Science", especially in the thesis I made; entitled "Design and construction of an inexpensive radio frequency identification earrings reader to support the National Livestock Traceability Program of the Ministry of Agricultural Development".
From these experiences I realized that research fills my desire to know, to feel that eureka moment when developing an idea or a project and in the course of the program I will have the opportunity find those moments. To continue a task in order to obtain the wished result is something that I’ve always done: I kept thinking how to find the solution. During the writing of the researches was the same, I focused on writing in a simple and complete way in order that the results were understood.
Inside teamwork, I can contribute by sharing my knowledge and motivate my colleagues to keep working. All the publications at which I have worked have been done in equipment by teachers of the university where I graduated. My enthusiasm and perseverance in a task lead me to progress, promoting this attitude in the group where I am.
Music is one of my favorite hobbies. I play guitar and write songs that come out of my inspiration, record it in the cell phone and then improve it. It has helped me in certain moments of my work; after a few hours of playing guitar, an idea appears out of nowhere, then they are two and three of how to solve my problem and continue my task.
I am willing to learn and give whatever is needed to continue my studies. Thank you for accepting my application and I am waiting for your answer.
Sincerely,
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I have some suggestions for your first three paragraphs. I am writing this letter to apply for the doctoral program A at the University X. D.
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I have some suggestions for your first three paragraphs.
I am writing this letter to apply for the doctoral program A at the University X.
D.
) and to be able to structure them to provide a solution to problems.
(This sentence is too long and contains a number of ideas.
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I have some suggestions for your first three paragraphs.
I am writing this letter to apply for the doctoral program A at the University X.
The main objective that motivates me to study for a Ph.D. degree is to be able to import and providetransfer knowledge (knowledge transfer is the standard phrase.) and research in my field of
I did some corrections to the paragraphs. The main idea is preserved and some of the unnatural phrases were changed.
The main objective that motivates me to study for a Ph.D. degree is to do knowledge transfer and research in my field of study in my country Panama, and carry out projects that benefit society. Being able to develop