motivation letter

could you correct this motivation letter for me
I graduated from high school in Syria last July 2012, and directly my family decided to move to the UAE, due to the current political crisis in Syria. We came here on 24 July 2012 and we started establishing a new life. At the beginning it was so hard for us to adjust to the new and different city. After that, I started working at the Dental Center in Dubai as a receptionist, during this period I attend English courses because I believe that English is an international language and it is important for me as a student whom look forward to having a master's degree in the future, then I applied for the TOEFL IBT (the result attached in the application).Then, in November 2014 I have started a German language course(A1 intensive course at the Babylon Center in Sharjah), and now I am attending the A2 intensive course in Goethe institute in Dubai (the letter from the institute is attached with my application). And, I registered for B1.1 (the receipt attached with the application) and that is to save time while I am waiting for the result of my application.
I choose Germany for many reasons, first of all since few months I have started learning German which I really like it a lot, and I found it very interesting and motivating itself. Furthermore, Germany is one of the best advanced country in the world. In addition the openness and the higher education systems which are followed in Germany is one of the most important reasons which attract me to choose to study in Germany. And, actually now a day we are surrounded by the computer science in every part of our life, so I believe that in Germany I can find the ideal environment to be a part of the Technology revolution in the world, and that is through achieving my dream of continuing my higher education and gain the Master degree in computer science.
Since I was in the high school I was very interested in programming languages. I tried to learn one of those languages from the Internet, and I have started with the JAVA language which was really awesome. Also, I have the passion of reading computer science articles, which gave me a wide feedback on it. In addition, I am very interested in studying Mathematics and physics, which is really an important subject in computer science education. All that has really made me excited to know more about computer science, and I decided to search for the university which could be the best place for me to be creative in this field of education. So, I have chosen Dortmund University to continue my Bachelor degree because it is one of the best universities in the computer science field, and it has an excellent reputation for decades and one of the first data processing units of Germany a magnetic drum computer was installed in Dortmund. So, I think I can gain a good experience in the scientific field which I really look forward. And, the most important thing is that it is dedicated to the Technology Park of Dortmund which, is the largest in Euro up, and that makes me existed because in such university, students can combine between science and industry.
I would like to inform you that the German course will start on-------- so the only obstacle in my way is the visa to travel immediately to Germany, and attached what proves that. So, I hope to accept my application as soon as possible so I am able to start my high educational career.