Motivation Letter

HI i have tried to add a bit about my education can you try and edit it again.
Plot 69
Driefontein Road Muldersdrift
1747
Monash South Africa 144 Peter Road
Ruimsig,Roodeport
1724
Gauteng
13 January 2012

Dear Sir/Madam

RE:Bursary Application Letter

I am writing this letter with intention of applying for a bursary to assist me in my educational development. I am currently enrolled in your institution for Bachelor of Public Health, and suffer from a shortage of financial resource. It is a basic barrier which keeps me from pursuing educational opportunities.

I hereby request to be a recipient of your bursary program to continue my studies smoothly. I pledge to do my best to surprise your expectations of me. I am a goal-oriented, quality minded student and have an excellent educational record. It is all credit to my school administration and teachers who maintained my educational status and helped me to excel within during my formative schooling.

In addition my goals are the road maps that guide me and showed me what is possible for my life. I have always wished to take part in people’s health and always wanted to do my best in helping the nation to recover. At high school I took life science and physical science subjects that gave me a bit experience in health. I have always been in the first position and was awarded a certificate from edcon in the third place, like to be against the odds im not afraid to be lonely at the top. With me, it is just the satisfaction of the game. Just performance. After my Matric I have done BAA(Basic Ambulance Course)which i experienced a lot from health field and with the experience I have that can allow me to do best in my degree.

I sincerely hope that i will merit your preferential to my application, and thank you in advance for considering my application.

I forward toward hearing from you as soon as possible.

Yours Sincerely
Fatima Solomons