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Gorodman Posted 18 years ago
Letter Writing
Motivation letter
Hi there! Could you be so kind to check my motivation letter. I will be really glad to see any comments. I also hope my letter will bring to someone an idea what to write in his letter of motivation. Thanks a lot
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to you because I have a strong desire to study in xxxx Program. My dream is to be a high qualified manager. I want to be a specialist who has thorough understanding of how the manufacturing and business processes are organized and who is able to use control mechanisms and a high-level strategic underpinning in project management.
While studying in xxx I have made great strides. I can even say that I have become one of the best students of the university. I have been always maintaining an excellent grade average. I have achieved several academic honors. After I finished the first academic year I was the only student on faculty who was transferred to the free course, i.e. since that moment the government started to cover my education expenses. Moreover, I was awarded to several scholarships as a student with excellent academic progress.
In order to be a high achiever and to be able to solve the problems which nobody could solve before I have to use such good qualities as extreme industry and purposefulness, high level of Emotional Intelligence and self-motivation. The work in student public organization brought me an experience of how to communicate with people and how to get together quickly a group of fellows and motivate them to work hard in order to fulfil a project in a fixed hour. While sports activities have always charged me with positive energy and strengthened my willpower.
In the end I should notice that it is really important for me to receive xxxx scholarship because my financial condition can not afford me to pursue any abroad study programs.
Obtaining a quality of xxxx from your university will not only strengthen my knowledge but will also help me to fulfil my dream to become a world level top manager. I thank you for the time you spend reading this letter. I am looking forward to a positive response.
Yours sincerely,
xxxxx
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to you because I have a strong desire to study in xxxx Program. My dream is to be a high qualified manager. I want to be a specialist who has thorough understanding of how the manufacturing and business processes are organized and who is able to use control mechanisms and a high-level strategic underpinning in project management.
While studying in xxx I have made great strides. I can even say that I have become one of the best students of the university. I have been always maintaining an excellent grade average. I have achieved several academic honors. After I finished the first academic year I was the only student on faculty who was transferred to the free course, i.e. since that moment the government started to cover my education expenses. Moreover, I was awarded to several scholarships as a student with excellent academic progress.
In order to be a high achiever and to be able to solve the problems which nobody could solve before I have to use such good qualities as extreme industry and purposefulness, high level of Emotional Intelligence and self-motivation. The work in student public organization brought me an experience of how to communicate with people and how to get together quickly a group of fellows and motivate them to work hard in order to fulfil a project in a fixed hour. While sports activities have always charged me with positive energy and strengthened my willpower.
In the end I should notice that it is really important for me to receive xxxx scholarship because my financial condition can not afford me to pursue any abroad study programs.
Obtaining a quality of xxxx from your university will not only strengthen my knowledge but will also help me to fulfil my dream to become a world level top manager. I thank you for the time you spend reading this letter. I am looking forward to a positive response.
Yours sincerely,
xxxxx
Top answer
hey, the letter is good. At least for me. I'd say, however, that you wrote too much about how great you are and can do.
- hey, the letter is good.
- At least for me.
- I'd say, however, that you wrote too much about how great you are and can do.
- i mean it is ok to do so- but not so explicitely.
- it strikes me the most.
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hey, the letter is good. At least for me. I'd say, however, that you wrote too much about how great you are and can do. i mean it is ok to do so- but not so explicitely. it strikes me the most. Otherwise great. Good job. Remember that's my own opinion and others may not agree with me
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Thanks for your comment! You are quete right. I'll try to remake the letter according to your remark.
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