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Kavchik Posted 19 years ago
Letter Writing

Motivation letter

0Hello and best regards dear editors,02br
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00After searching so long on internet to find some usefull information about writing a motivation letter I found this Forum. First of all I want to thank all those how are here to help people like me. I read about how to post and how to write letters here. I have already wrote my own and would like to ask your kind help to edit and improve it before I send to the institution where I applied. I paste the letter here under and hope to get an answer. I thank you in advance for your kind attention.02br
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00Sincerely, Kaveh02br
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00Dear Mr. -----,02br
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00I am graduated from Kiev National University of Construction and Architecture in 2004 and I obtained a master degree in Architecture of Buildings and Structures. As my thesis held a remarkable quality, I was invited to attend for PhD from the exam commission. I started my PhD on September 2004 with a 3 year contract in the mentioned university. 02br
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00Through some reasons I left my PhD studies and shifted to the Netherlands on August 2005. With thinking of continuing my studies, I got to know about DTI before coming to the Netherlands and started my correspondents through email. But later I understood that in the Netherlands I will have new responsibilities from rules here and I have to follow a Dutch language course for 1.5 years, which is going to be finished by end of March 2007. Meanwhile I gathered new information and brochures through internet and TUDelft. By Getting to know more about DTI, I understood that for few reasons this is the best study and opportunity for me. One strong reason is the duration of the study, while doing a PhD is at least 4 years, and I am already 1.5 years away from higher education. I am not sure even if I can find a PhD research which I am interested in. Another reason is that I am a new comer to the Netherlands Architecture market and I have to learn much about the methods, styles and standards which is used here in the companies. As DTI is a combination of studying and working together, it would be easier for me to get to this market. One more important reason is my foreign diploma here which is going to be not trusted automatically and than investigated by every company I apply to work. But by getting DTI diploma, I am graduated from a high level recognised university with a registered title in the Netherlands. 02br
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00Obtaining the ability to improve and renovate the architectural design processes seems to be necessary as the design and building industry are now mostly facing old practical but not scientifically methods. Today’s fast developments in architecture and structures must meet the new concepts to manage different parts of the design process. DTI offers the knowledge to solve the management problems to improve the process design and making more effective and better quality of the projects. 02br
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00These reasons and the knowledge I got in the information day of DTI, were enough to persuade me and make me think that with DTI I will be sure of my future carrier and diversify my professional education. Certainly this science presents wider possibilities to find a higher level position in design process worldwide. I am very motivated by self-interest on complex and greater architectural projects what I was busy with from the first day I started to work as an architect. DTI will teach me not only how these complexities are arranged in different phases, but how to manage them as well. I believe the management and finding solutions are higher and more important than being busy with only one phase of a design process as an architect. In the other hand gaining the required additional knowledge in technological management as well as in architecture, building and planning makes DTI a unique and unusual study for further developing in education and carrier. 02br
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00 I hope I can make a good progress with the vitality and the energetic style what I find in myself about DTI now. After I talked with the few students from DTI, I have more interests now to get to the study, as I understood about the very friendly and light atmosphere inside the faculty and between colleagues. I would welcome a personal interview to further discuss this opportunity. I thank you in advance for your kind attention to my letter and I hope to meet you in near future.02br
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00Sincerely yours,0-
  

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0Hi, nice letter overall, you've stated your case very well. 02br 02br 00Dear Mr. -----,02br 02br 00I graduated00 from Kiev National University of Construction and Architecture in 2004 and I obtained a master degree in Architecture of Buildings and Structures.

  • 0Hi, nice letter overall, you've stated your case very well.
  • 02br 02br 00Dear Mr.
  • -----,02br 02br 00I graduated00 from Kiev National University of Construction and Architecture in 2004 and I obtained a master degree in Architecture of Buildings and Structures.
  • As my thesis 00was of high quality00, I was invited to 00take a PhD by the00 exam commission.
  • I started my PhD on September 2004 with a 3 year contract, 00also at Kiev University00.
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0Hi, nice letter overall, you've stated your case very well. I've made corrections for you highlighted in blue, and added comments and highlighted in pink other problem areas you need to re-write or clarify.02br
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00Dear Mr. -----,02br
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00I graduated00 from Kiev National University of Construction and Architecture in 2004 and I obtained a master
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0Hi dear nona the brit,02br
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00Thank you so so so much for your help. this is really a great help. your edition is very clear and now I understand my mistakes and I will work on your comments. 02br
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00I would like to tell you about the pink highlights, I see that you ask questions and this means I didnt write my meaning clearly!! so may be you have
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0Hi again.02br
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00First highlight: the problem I had with this is that you earlier said 'But later I understood that in the Netherlands I will have new responsibilities from rules here and I have to follow a Dutch language course for 1.5 years, which is going to be finished by end of March 2007.'. to me it sounds as though it is a requirement from them - that you HAVE to
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0 Hi all.I really delighted to see ll peoples helping each other.This thing encouraged me to ask help and suggestion for my motivation letter for graduate program.I thank to all in advance..02br
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00Power Electronics is an enabling technology, with vast applications in various fields. Some of the more fa
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0Hi all.I really delighted to see ll peoples helping each other.This thing encouraged me to ask help and suggestion for my motivation letter for graduate program.I thank to all in advance..02br
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01b00Letter of Intent02b02br
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00Power Electronics is an enabling technology, with vast applications in various fields. Some of the more f
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can u give me some help to start the motivation letter of taking admission in masters programme in electrical engineering with majors of telecommunication and radio communication

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Dear All,

I'm French and i would like to send my cv to an english fashion company. Would you help me to transform my motivation letter in a correct english?
Thanking you a lot for any information or help!
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