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Motivation Letter

I'm going to apply for a training in an international programme with my company and I had to write a motivation letter. I read other post on the subject. Please give me your kind comments/remarks/correction about the letter I wrote and help me to improve it.

Sincerely yours,

Clément,

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Dear ***,

With this letter I would like to introduce my candidature for the ***.

I have an aeronautical engineering background, have no more than one year of professional experience, good language skills in English as well as in French and German and in addition, I spend one year in Germany. I am just under 25 years old and currently working for *** – the *** consulting subsidiary regarding aviation safety. My profile fulfill all the requirements needed to apply for ***

Through my studies in ***, I had the opportunity to work in a international environment which colleagues from varied backgrounds, I regard this experience as really useful to work in a complex international environment. In addition to technical knowledge, networks, general and multicultural qualifications have become indispensable.

In 2003, I had participate in frame of an European Project, in an international and interdisciplinary environment, which I really appreciate. Then following this first experience, I choose to do a ***. This master covers both technical, legal and economic aspects of certification and gave me an overview of a wide range of work within aeronautics world. This multi-aspects approach gave me the opportunity to learn how to work in an international environment with people having different academic and cultural backgrounds and to deal with technical and non-technical aspects of a project. Learning is for me an active never-ending process.

Through my work or during previous internship, I had contact with different business units. Each of them have a different competences and “work style”. I choose to work on ***. This new field of aeronautic is moving fast and I really enjoy taking part and contributing to the development and achievement of ambitious projects such as ***.

My main attraction to join *** was first the aerospace products and then the chance to work in an international organization with challenging projects. I see in this programme the opportunity to obtain an overview of different business units in a short period of time; gain a better understanding of the *** organization and learn keys to handle complex situations in an international business environment.

I consider *** as a good preparation and introduction to successfully work in ***, and as a potential future participant, I am ready to get fully involve working in teams, to analyze situations, participate to challenging project within the aerospace and defense industry.

I believe that the aim of the program is consistent with my academic background and aspirations. I am confident that with the knowledge gained through *** program I will gain necessary skills and experience that will help me take a giant step towards reaching my professional goals.

Thank you very much for your time and considering my request. It would be a great pleasure to participate to the next *** and contribute to a constructive debating atmosphere.

Kindest regards,
  

Top answer

Hi Clément, As I read your letter quickly, I got the impression that you have strung together a bunch of buzz words. I don't get the sense that there is much substance. Try cutting down on the buzz words and being more personal.

  • Hi Clément, As I read your letter quickly, I got the impression that you have strung together a bunch of buzz words.
  • I don't get the sense that there is much substance.
  • Try cutting down on the buzz words and being more personal.
  • In 2003, I had participate in frame of an European Project, in an international and interdisciplinary environment, which I really appreciate.
  • Then following this first experience, I choose to do a ***.
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Hi Clément,

As I read your letter quickly, I got the impression that you have strung together a bunch of buzz words. I don't get the sense that there is much substance. Try cutting down on the buzz words and being more personal.
In 2003, I had participate in frame of an European Project, in an international and interdisciplinary environment, which I really appreciat
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Hi Clement,

If I were you, I’ll keep the cover letter short and simple (KISS – Keep it short and simple). If you write everything on a page, the reader will lose interest and will eventually stop reading. I believe a cover letter plus a resume is more effective.

Regards,

Ed
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Thanks for all this information. I tried to re-write my letter taking into account your remarks,
Please what is your feeling regarding this new version ?

clément,
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With this letter I would like to introduce my candidature for the next *** Programme.

I have an aeronautical engineering background, have no more than one year of professional experience, good

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