Motivation Letter

Dear MontainHiker:

I'm going to apply for a master's degree in e-commerce. the school asked me to write:
A personal letter explaining why you want to join this
programme and what you expect from your studies at ***
University.
Although I have lived in US for 4 years, but since I haven't used my English during the last two years, it became so bad...as you see later...
Please give me your kind comments about the letter I wrote and help me to correct it.
Sincerely yours,
Jay T
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Letter of Motivation

Manager of the Program
Division of Industrial Marketing & e-Commerce
*** State University

January 2nd, 2005


Dear Sir or Madam:

I am writing to apply for the Master’s Program in e-Commerce.

I have achieved a bachelor's Degree in English Language Translation from…,. In 1998. During my studies, I had a course in Translation of Economic texts that increased my interest in the connection between my job (Marketing and Sales Assistant) and Business. Although I have promoted to Vice President Marketing of the same company, but I still wanted to continue my education in the field of Business at a post-graduate level. Therefore, I moved to….and I started a MBA at American University of…..in… At the same time, I was working as Public Relations and Insurance Manager of a company that I used Excel spreadsheets to define special forms for related reports for insurance companies. After passing eight MBA courses, I I had decided to continue my education at a western University. I moved to US to complete my degree there. I took nine MBA courses in the university of…. ….In this university, I learned the values of teamwork and commitment. I learned how to concentrate and focus on goals. It taught me systematical researching, analytical thinking and information evaluation, but most of all it has provided me with deeper insight of Business. Also it has been great help in co-living and communicating with various people and different societies.
My first acquaintance with e-commerce goes back to when I was living in …six years ago where I could order an item through internet and then the merchant was sending me the item with its carrier service and I could pay him either in cash or by check. In November 2000, our university was the host university of Decision Science Institute's year 2000 annual meeting in Orlando and I went with my IT professor. I had the chance to meet with famous e-commerce and IT researchers like Efraim Turban and… I went to some workshops in this conference and I really liked the subject. Then I have decided to do an e-commerce major which our university did not have. After the conference, I concentrated more on e-commerce subject and I noticed that in US, there are several private e-businesses like Amazon.com, Dell.com and etc are very successful. I also noticed several governments' institutions like Police Department and Municipality are offering many services just through their websites. During my job at ***, I had the chance to see one of the practical aspects of e-commerce and networking directly since the company is using a comprehensive networking software which it could serve its customers not through U.S. but also through the other sites in all over the world.
I always enjoyed learning about business and especially computer Science and IT and following technological developments and seeing their implications. My business background is an excellent pathway to a master's degree in e-commerce. A master's degree will give me the up-to-date tools and knowledge to be competitive and competent.

To prepare myself better for this objective I completed a course in E-commerce in College of Economics in …University. Also I took related computer course like HTML, FrontPage, Flash, SQL Server in branch of…College in my country.I speak English fluently and also I have gained a satisfactory level of the French.I think having fair knowledge of the above-mentioned courses is necessary to do an e-MBA.
After completing my masters program, I would like to continue my education and obtain a Ph.D. in Information Technology. This degree would enable me to combine a teaching career with advising e-business solutions to both private sector and government. Teaching college students is more than a one-way channel; I would also learn from their questions like my professors have from mine. In advising business, I can help them strike a balance between economic and environmental concerns. GIS will be a useful tool in helping me give them crucial information.
Now I would like to focus on a Master programme which offers a wide range of subjects and electives, which will let me broaden my interests ine-Commerce.
From prior students and research, I have learned that *** University is known for its high academic standards. Wanting to focus both on knowledge and critical thinking, I am hoping this University will help me achieve all my goals.
I find it important to be equipped with the right theoretical tools; but nonetheless, it is decisive to get experience from an educational system and country that is one of the leading ones in the area of IT and E-Commerce. Therefore, I would expect the University of …to provide me with applied and practical courses which could help me in my future educational and work progress. This is creating an exciting environment to gain both knowledge and inspiration.

Thank you very much for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response.

Sincerely yours,

Jay T…